All Comments on 'The Life of Sara Wincester Ch. 01'

For an experienced writer I was surprised at the number of technical / homophone errors (your/you're they're/their) punctuation ("brothers" vice "brother's", "each others" vice "each other's"), verb form ("...he soon pull away and promptly threw...").

Once past that the dialogue was fast and fun. The images were vivid. And the sex wanton. Looking forward to more.

Wild premise, but I feel like the 'world-building' is left a bit unexplained. How is she 'safe' from being used by any guy in this world? Just because she's living at home? Do all women only get 'freely used' by their own family members? She just never leaves the house to stay safe?

I agree should have left the older men on this one.

I give you an 'A' for the story and an 'F' for spelling and punctuation.

Fun story. Pretty well written especially for your first one. I spotted some tense changes but that’s about it.

The dialogue was really well constructed and helped move the story along. We also learned a lot about the two girls and their other incestuous relationships.

Good job

Love to have a sexy sister.

Many chapters shy

I love this strange world you created! More please! 5 stars.

Definitely a great story, but im kind of curious why there are no inverse stories. You know, like male free use instead of women? I feel like that could be really hot if done well

Wish in your story you should have let Rachel visit Sara's Bedroom &. Let max get his balls licked & finally got her pussy fucked too.

Secondly, get Rachel lick Sara's pussy licked by Rachel. &. Teach Max how to do it properly.

Thirdly Get Sarah's Daddy on the phone to take them girls both for a dinner &. Bring back the sexy slim college girl waitress back home to introduce Max and get them hitched with each other for future dates & fucks.

Family will be happy together.

Loved this, would live to hear about the nursing handjobs!

More please. So turned on thinking about the friend listening on the phone.

So the title gives her the last name of Wincester but in the first line of the story you named her Williams. So what is it supposed to really be?

I generally enjoyed the way you employed Free Use in your world building. A lot of people who write free use stories describe behavior that I find disturbing and abusive. But I agree with the others who commented that they hated the cross generational incest. Be that as it may, I enjoyed Rachel and Sara competing for Rachel's father's approval. I gave you a 4/5 in spite of the other parts that had me wanting to give it a lesser score. 😏