All Comments on 'The Link Pt. 03: The Huntress'

Great story and lesson for humanity, I love it. As a story, it is right up there with Dan Brown. As a lesson, it is as deep as Deepak Chopra and Joseph Campbell. The difference is that this story is told with simplicity and heart. Thank you for it.

...lots and lots of filler material...had to skim through it...the wagging eyebrows thing is beyond corny...and I'm an old guy. Interesting premise, but needs intelligent editing...misspelled homonims, ignorance of distinction between lie and lay, or of "name and me" as compared to "name and I". Doubt if author knows what I'm talking about...its high school English, but not in the usa, I guess.

Sure, there are nits to pick, but I won't pick them. A couple of things I would have liked to see. One, in particular, is what ever happened to Abigail after Sam, Betty, and friends rescued Natalie and Teegan? After Teegan and Caleb returned to the estate - and we learned that Victor was in charge - I was expecting to see Abigail there also.

Super job! Thank you for that.

I have some issues with parts of the tales but I really can't complain about anything. The writing was engaging and entertaining, and I thoroughly enjoyed it!

I'm disappointed to read that your work was stolen and you'll no longer share stories here but I totally understand. I really hope that you continue writing though, you've got a talent.

Thank you! It was a pleasurable read. I enjoyed the premise and wish I had ANY of your talent.

Such a well written story from an imaginative author. The biggest failing was the failure to explain the evil. No spoilers here, but why leave such a huge piece with no explanation of origin or understanding of its power? If anything, the outcome pointed to what should have been a desire to keep her alive and trapped, not to kill her. That entire character made no sense at all. That was a big disappointment.

although I did struggle a bit with all the repetitive thoughts of love between Teegan and Caleb, I thought it quite juvenile and immature. But then I thought well they are teenagers, and this is how teenagers feel about love and relationships, not mature and they do obsess over it and declare it, and bask in it. Mature love like Teegan's parents is yet to come to them.

The part starting around page 15 where Teegan gets strength from other is fantastic, and the end wrapped things up nicely. Love a good ending.

Peace on earth, I started the story at the beginning and couldn't stop until I finished all 3 parts. I appreciate your work very much. Thank you!

I absolutely loved the story. You should really write a book. It's a waste for such a great story to only be here

Very unusual.

I find find it unlikely that this author is not published. I’ve been working my way through all of his work and have, so far, found all his stories to be about as great as this one. This is about an unlikely venue as I can imagine ! ( I’ve been hanging around here for years and like it !) I wish I could think of a way to turn my wife on to it, she would love it...

I couldn’t put it down. It took me 15 hours to finish all three books. The storyline was fabulous and thrilling. The final battle was the ultimate test between good and evil. Love can really conquer all. Well written and with a minimum of errors.

Like an idiot I thought at about 11pm., I'd just start this stupid story, and finish it later at my convenience. At about 4.30 am I realised that I was knackered and going to feel totally foozled and fucked over, so I'm going to give a tired, sleepy, pissed off five pointy things to a well conceived and executed story line.

Now it's 4am and I can get some sleep. I skipped the sex parts as I felt it spoiled it for me but everything else was a joy. Only five stars from me and a big thank you to DreamCloud for this work. Bloody well done.

I loved the whole series. Thank you for writing them.

You’re very talented.

You are the best author on this site, period . This is an awesome tale, I have read it 4-5 times and every single time I read them , i read every single word and love it all .

Sad you don’t write here anymore , at least tell us where to find you or if you are published , where to get your stuff.

Love for all the great reading time that you have given us over the years

Thank you. Good stuff.

This has to be one of the most difficult stories to write, I have seen on here. You tied together thoughts, and people flawlessly from earlier parts. The story it self was good, but you brought it to life like probably few could. You sir are a genius !

No new post in 3 years..

Looks like DC has moved on, huh?

You are indeed a great writer. You developed the plot and and the characters so well I feel I know them at the end of the story. What's more the plot holds together very well for all three sections of the story. Great job. I really enjoy your work.

Dream Cloud is on wattpad under Mike Potter.

You made my heart swell. Thank you.

You had so many twists and turns. It was more than I expected. I am glad I read it to the end. Another amazing story, if only it would happen.

I am an avid reader of all genres. The Link is one of the most imaginative and compelling stories I have had the good fortune to discover. Once I started reading, I could not stop until the final phrase. I have since read many of your other stories and found them to be heart-felt and rewarding reads. Thank You for making the sexual components engaging and something far more interesting than gratuitous cum-fests. You have serious talent.

Nothing to @

There can be too much darkness in the world as we perceive it. Shine the light.

Thank you

Beautiful. Thank you for sharing this story with us.

A very long, convoluted story. Don't normally read stuff like this, but started and then got caught up in the story. Different and a very nice read, even if it was so long.

Thank you.

I just need to give my thanks to you for making this just about a perfect happy ending. Was worrying at a lot of points in this series that we'd have extremely depressing ends to some characters, but anyone that really mattered ended up happy. Well worth the anxiety injected into the drama.

Thank you for writing this story. The build up and story telling was masterful with a wonderfully created world and characters.

One thing I did notice, seniors in AP math, shouldn’t that be Calculus instead of PreCalc? Nothing important but just a side thought.

I love reading this story. I read your Bio, you stated, "My new stories will never see the light of day - sorry to all those who enjoyed my previous work." I hope you have found some else to share your stories.

Thank You For this Story. I always Read the 1st One because I Love How Sam and Natalie are but Man has this story taken Off. Keep Up The Good Work.

As Always Hope All Is Well And You And Your Family Is In Good Health.

This is a very well written and well developed story. You did great with the charators and the plot. It just a wonderful story. Thank you.

One of the best stories I've ever read, and I've read tens of thousands. My fav because it is so full of hope and courage, devotion and loving, kind intention.

I'd like to see this in a book - can I pre-order? Please write more like this - we desperately need the hope for the future and faith in the power of pure love.

Well done, Dreamcloud!!

Your talents are something to be admired.

What a wonderful series. I have thoroughly enjoyed it, even if I've stayed up just a little too late every night for the past week. My only criticism is that this doesn't seem to fit well on this site- there's scant little erotic content. Nonetheless, the story was great. I loved the end!

I love reading your stand alone storys and I finally decided to try one of your series. Wow! I was totally blown away by this one. I kept reading to all hours. Right now it's 12:45 a.m.! The story was brilliant and I would love to see the movie, It's that good. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story with all of us. Cheers from one of your many fans.

Thank you.

Would have made a more climatic ending if Caleb would have died.

No. This isn't that kind of story. It's a magnificent tale about the powers of a creature thousands of years ahead of her time bringing about a happy ending. If you want a story that doesn't tie up so neatly, maybe spend a little money and buy a Tom Clancy novel. Or if you don't want to pay, Google a writer named NetWolf and read his erotic novel Camp: Ron's Journey. There's plenty of pain and loss in that one while still being one of the best stories I've ever read, paid or not. I would post the website, but I don't think literotica will let me.

I, for one, absolutely ADORE the way this one all came together, especially the ultimate resolution of world peace. Normally, I would feel something similar to Anonymous, in that I don't like everything to work out so cleanly (John Grisham's The Street Lawyer had that very effect upon me), but this just makes too much damned sense. If there were such a woman (or man) as Teegan, it would only make sense that she could change the world so dramatically.

Negatives first. Hated the peace on earth ending, but came to terms with it. First the eternal realist in me hated the idealism. Then I realized many beautiful things have happily ever after endings and realized that this is no different. Also that nothing lasts and it could all escalate nack up again in in a few, doxen or hundred years.

Second. Author clearly female and does not understand men. Probably a feminist but still can't help but have a very reactionary storyline despite revolutionary social relations on the surface. A pure story of good vs evil. The great hero adventurer that assumes his role as king by the end is just a woman for some reason. Superficial. The jokes about masculinity were utterly shallow, without understanding the meaning of roles in a functional social order brought about by hard men who stay awake at night so nobody gets killef in their bed, including you reading this at 2am in your bed.

Everything else was positive. The way the author describes and find words for emotions, especially love is sensational. I swear my gf irl has caught the link from me after I've got it from reading this. The patience with pacing, lack of explaining when uneccessary, the thought out wrapup, everything besides the small negatives I started with were fabulous.

Although fiction, it was very well written and put together. I'm a big guy, veteran, and retired cop. As the title of my comment says, it caused a waterworks that seldom happens to this old man.

This is clearly the best story on this site . ANd it gives me real pleasure to see I’m just one of the vast majority of readers who agree with me.

Spectacular work ! Keep writing , you have a gift , not unlike the “link” . Let us know if you are on another site or are now , deservedly , published.

After reading this, I might have to reexamine how I look at my wife from now on.

I have yet another soaked sleeve. So much love in your work. Please keep writing.

Amazing. Simply amazing. I can't remember the last time I was so moved by a story. You have a gift!

...that you no longer publish here. You truly are a talent. This story took me through so many emotions, fear to love, laughter to tears.

Thank you DC for sharing your talents.

I just wanted to say Thank You!

Utterly tremendous! One of the best series I have ever read. The editing needs to be tightened, but the story line is gripping, sensual, but not grossly erotic. Not quite G-Rated, but close. Absolutely a must read in my view. Enjoy it. The series is long, but entirely worth it. A must read!

I liked this series very much. The end here vaguely reminded me of Palace Beautiful.

Great epic story, nice and full of hope. “So live that people can see that love is the best answer to the world.”

Outstanding!!!!

This is the most powerful piece of literature I've ever had the pleasure and honor to read on this site. I hope you continue writing wherever you are.

WOW! What a wonderful and beautiful story. The first of this Authors stories I have read and now I'm hooked. Last activity was 4 years ago. I'd love to see him come back to submit more. Thank you DreamCloud, thank you!

I read this in 2 days and 1 night. All three parts. That's how much I loved it. Sam and Teegan's connection was how I fell in love with the story. But all the characters were all fantastically written. Fell in love with nana Rose too. Reminded me of my own nana.

Amazing. Surprisingly, I haven't really though about World Peace a lot. World Peace is really quite a lovely thing. Such a powerful concept to bring together nations. And Is real/Palestine, N/S Korea is still very relevant today.

Very powerful theme of using anger and hatred as a crutch, Teena is finally able to unlock and embrace the full transformative effect of love.

3 AM, second day... a wonderful story even the 2nd time around. Those who stole your work have cheated us all.

For once I may be truly envious of a fictional character. I would give anything to feel what they have with their spouse. I love my wife and I know she loves me, but this is so very different. You’ve created something genuinely beautiful in this story and did it in a manner that wasn’t corny or contrived and did not portray the main characters as Mary Sues.

Phenomenal story overall, really good sci-fi focused on individual relationships. Thanks for writing this.

he writes in wattpad.com named mike potter

I don’t think you truly understand what a true gift you possess or maybe you do because you wrote about someone who possesses a great gift as well. I have stopped reading stories before getting through the first page because of grammatical errors. Your story (all 3 parts) were chock full of them yet I didn’t care because the writing was that damn good! I can with all sincerity, joy, love and honesty tell you that you are one of the best writers I’ve ever come across in my life. This encompasses EVERYTHING I’ve ever read! You are now in my top 5 favorite authors. Edgar Allen Poe is my favorite and number 1 on that list. I have never read a piece of literature that has evoked so many emotions in me and made me feel such a profound sense of joy, wonder and gratefulness in having been blessed with reading it. Again, I thank you for sharing your blessed gift with us undeserving wretches and beg of you to publish your work. This book alone would become a best seller that would soon become a book that breaks the world’s record for being on The New York Times bestseller’s list the longest and would also win the Pulitzer Prize, The John Newbery Medal, Edgar Awards and the National Book Critics Circle Award. You are a magical weaver of words and I pray with all my heart that the world will one day witness it as well. Thank you!

Another amazing chapter, again would give it 10 stars if I could, thank for the writing, the characters, the story, this and part's 1 and 2 are the best thing I've read in 20 years bar none. I only hope that you have been discovered and are writing for a living because you were born to write and to inspire great feelings in people.

amazing, better than anything i would actually go out to buy, massive props

This is the second time I've read the story and it is as gripping as the first time. Outstanding.

OutSTANDing!

One of the best books I’ve ever read, of any type or genre.

Very well done. I couldn't put it down

GREAT

I was hooked from the beginning, and am so glad I stayed to the end!

Very well done.

Holy shit, this is an epic. Excellence.

Not sure whether this is my fourth or fifth time reading this story. It is the writing and a story that I never tire of reading.

That was not only the best thing I’ve read on this site, it was flat out one of the best books I’ve read this year. This should be in print.

I really enjoyed this story thank you it was a great read. Sorry it ended

this is the bad part, of this story, THE END

is wish i could unread THE LINK so i good read it again for the first time

now i can only reread it ....

thank you for sharing

this is defenitly the best story on LIT.....

5 stars, a little more development of how Caleb was so in line with Teegan would have been nice

Somebody should film this... maybe steven spielberg??

The military wouldn’t need the phones, they would track the airplane. It’s in part why executives ride other companies airplanes, it hides merger targets ( strangely as companies are required to do by law. ), simple courtesies of offering a ride saving flight time as well.

The military knowing Teegans location and a orbits involvement would also have noticed frequent trips of his plane to old town Maine

But tidbits aside a very enjoyable story

Stories foretold and then told well

Undeniable love overcoming hatred’s hell

Cheeks stained with teary tracks

Hearts overwhelmed overflowing simple facts

Poets and musicians

Spending time with politicians

I can’t imagine a finer story

Too you sweet author, please accept well all the glory

I really enjoyed this story. Can't believe someone could sell plagiarized stories on Amazon. Is there no way to correct or compensate? Can't Amazon prevent this by examining what's offered for sale before it goes public? Can someone plagiarize & sell commercially published works? Do we have to lose all the good authors?

very good. I like positive endings. good plot

Wonderful story!!

Best story I've read for quite some time. Pure excellence!

Amazing!

Took 3 days to finish but it was worth it.

A second read, still one the best stories on site. Thank you for your efforts, and hard work, I look forward to more from you.

Sorry the system will not let me give more stars, Thanks again, hoping your world is good.

North Pacific

OMG. Absolutely the best read. Good luck on future work.

If some afternoon, one or more of these characters should stop by and prop a hip on the corner of your desk for a bit, there are many of us who would love to review any of your subsequent journal entries.

Kept coming up and I avoided it numerous times, then I saved it to read later after seeing it was one of your works. My God was a wonderful distraction from this thing we call life.

I hope that somewhere, somehow, you will know how much I loved reading this. I'd say this is the best story on this site...

...but then, I know your other work.

Overall great. Just a little disappointed with the ending. I. Would love to know more about Teegan, Caleb and the rest.

At the risk of sounding like a broken record, I truly wish there were more stars to award DreamCloud for this one! She not only tells such detailed and thought-provoking stories, but her innate desire to illuminate the good side of people is a gift that we should pay attention to. She wants this world to be a better place with people living in harmony despite our differences. I can't agree more.

Wow just wow. Absolutely loved it. Well written and well thought out plot with loveable characters. Now I am off to read some of your other works.

Brilliant, great character builds, awesome original story , honesty I’m a bit humbled by your talent been a long time since I cried reading a book but you made it that real and I just want to say thank you and amazing.

Overall the storey is definitely worth 5 stars, but I only rated this last chapter ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ Because of the abrupt ending.

Second time reading this, second time blown away. Who is DreamCloud? His talent is amazing. Only matched on Lit by AspenEssling ( those two getting together would be like Lennon/ Mcartney). A wonderful story, thanks again for sharing. This time it helped pass time while I was sick with Covid.

I enjoyed this story a lot, thanks for sharing it. I would like to criticize the "final" villain however. His attempt to corrupt the links came out of nowhere and the how and why for such an ability was completely unexplained. The assassination attempts also don't seem to fit into this plan at all. Since the antagonists did not play a big role anyway its not a big issue but it really left me confused and seems like it was ham fisted last second.

An excellent story, if it were only possible to settle all our petty differences. It will never be possible as long as there is the mindset that says "My god is better than your god". or one religion looking down on another. The old altruistic phrase "Live and let live" is not possible in the world as we know it as long as there are people who believe the only 'right' way to live is their way. We can only hope there is an angel out there....................

@DreamCloud, I love you. Will you Marry me?

wow. thank you for sharing your work with us, you have transcribed a dream. truly a story, and we can all hope the dream grows.

You made my tears flowing freely down my cheeks ...... Unbelievable wonderful ....... Unfortunately the so called evil being will never e ereased by humans , because we are evil and sinners ...... We would need Teegans and her family construction or her kiddys, this would be the only future before we destroy this blue planet ...... The fight with the devil was coming down to an perfect dramatic extraordinary simple task - love, love filtered into one big source a fabulous idea ...... And so i would loveto read neas about north/south corea or isreal &palastina and some more ...... Yes turning soldiers into a real helping force would solve the real problems with apocalyptic dimensions starting right now on earth

This thre parts was one of the best i ever read here, more loke a romance and an advertisement for love family kiddys ah music

So ten stars are not enough hearts may help further

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I saw in your bio that you had some works stolen and posted to Amazon, and I’m very sorry to hear it. If that act has cost us the opportunity to read even one story from you, then I curse the thief, for he has stolen from us all! If you’re still writing, I would really appreciate it if you would put a link or some way to find your content, because you are a wonderful storyteller!