by TheWriter
Five stages of grief, yes? Denial, anger, bargaining, depression, acceptance
Theres a clear beginning middle and end. The beginning is resistance, the middle is gradual acceptance and the end is her fully accepting / enjoying the machine. I thought it was great. If you're seriously mad about this piece, keep masturbating until you're not
I have mixed feelings. First, I must say I don't see the reason for so much hate in the comments. Now for my opinion... I found the story to be rather interesting, and by that I mean that I read it all the way through because I wanted to know what happens next. I don't try to judge it as something it isn't, though - it has no plot or even structure, but its a short flick and doesn't really need all of that.
I found the narration to be too awkward for me. It's interesting in its own way, but I can't say the story made me horny or seemed very erotic.
It would be better if the machine did other things too.
Whether I fully comprehend this story's meaning or not, and even though I'm not sure I enjoyed this story, you are an excellent writer
See, I didn't quite get the end though. I thought of it as confusing. :)
A very artistic story.
As a writer myself, I know that true stories don't need a beginning, middle, and end. That's just the crap they teach the kids at school to put a little structure into their lives.
Writing great stories isn't a skill that can be gained through learning structures and rules. It can only be gained through practical experience.
Its certainly an unorthodox format and an extreme story, which makes it understandable that many or most may not appreciate it, but I think this was very well written. Its unapologetic in its content and the structure is somewhat hypnotically poetic.
An exploration of the extreme. I admire your bravery, and your writing.
I like it. I don't think a story needs a beginning, middle, end or even clear cut characters to work. I came in about 5 minutes (rare for me).
You have a nice style, keep up the good work
Beginning
Middle
End
This "story" had none of this. How about taking the images in your head and using words to describe them in the form of a story?
Read about a quarter of the story and quickly came to the conclusion that this story was just crap.
I'm a girl (seems to matter to some people here), and I kinda like the story. I like wondering who she was before this (self-righteous?) and who has done this to her (for her?).
I would have liked to see the ending a little cleaner, a little more hemmed. Other than that, it wasn't a bad read.
U drove her out of her mind just have well killed her. Make U happy does it?