All Comments on 'The Making of an Ass Man'

Very well done!

Enjoyed it fully!

Loved it, very dirty and sexy

Is this an attempt to write Jeannie out of the story? Only reason I ask is because you literally made Josh hooking up with Jeannie a central theme of several chapters. I applaud that she’s rediscovered her husband but it seems a bit abrupt given that Jeannie cried when Josh left the hospital so that indicated it went beyond just a very good fuck.

One other thing, in this chapter Jeannie had a recollection of the speech she made about saving her pussy for her husband but on the night before Josh left the hospital she yelled out “Fuck Steve” and took Josh fully into her pussy and nearly passed out with pleasure (I might’ve embellished a bit there). That felt completely glossed over in this chapter. I have no complaints just a few questions. Well done

I made a comment about developing more of the nurses story and right under my nose a couple of days earlier, you dropped this in the Anal category. That being said, very well done and explain a lot about Jeannie and Steve and great growth in Steve to recognize the needs of his wife. Would be interesting is Jeannie shared with Steve about Joshua and his mother and got him involved in the other story line some how to give Jennifer what she needed since Josh did the same for Jeannie and helped Josh's father overcome his reluctance to pleasure his wife in what she needs. Make things a bit complicated thought, but I see workable.

You seem to be overusing commas throughout this story, despite this not being a noticeable problem in your previous stories. For example, "No other man before him had pumped such a big, boiling blast of baby-batter into her bowels, as her loving husband did, in that moment!" would be better written entirely without commas. Also, when Steve says "I'm not done with you, yet", the comma can also be removed. These are minor mistakes, but they are oddly noticeable since they were not present in your other works.

This story features a particular fetish: a man cums in a woman’s ass and keeps going. The man can ejaculate twice or even thrice without pulling out after the anal creampie or he can pull out and then immediately reinsert to continue the act.

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