All Comments on 'The Marshal Pt. 06'

Still going strong!

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Surprised that he moved to that particular witness protection, I assumed they'd be separated and he'd have to ride to the rescue again. Lovely instalment full of emotion.

There’s an saying that writers should never use a chapter where paragraph would do and never use a paragraph where a sentence would do. Keep it tight and keep the story moving forward. This, part 6 of an otherwise good story, has added nothing to the tale, but has spent a long time doing it. Time maybe to just take a step back, re-evaluate and decide where is this story going.

This is a great story and of course not every episode can be filled with violence and risk. The struggle Britney has with her father’s death, while not dramatic, gives depth to the reality of a person being forced to leave all behind in Witsec. I thought it was illuminating while also giving us a thread of apprehension about her being recognized and how that could play out. keep going, it deserves the effort.

Fantastic story. I'm hooked!