by Leenysman
I liked it as it was different, and got me to thinking what if... Good job
PB
I thoroughly enjoyed the premise presented in your story. That said, I feel you should have sment more time developing the characters themselves, and possibly have the mutation manifest itself over a longer period of time. I usually don't care for the one page Lit stories, but feel this has a lot of potential, and plenty of room for development.
You're one of the better writers on this site, I hope you continue to contribute.
The idea was to see whether people liked the premise, before deciding whether to expand upon it. I assume yours would be a vote to expand the story.
I've no idea where you can take this, but it is way to interesting to let die with a one-page chapter. Thanks, 5*.
Yes, really great story - well written and it certainly was at a level rarely seen but very well received !! Yes, I think Amber and her brother should have real sex and keep that link going. I think another chapter is in order, so they can all experience all the family combinations. Might as well as that link won't go away it seems.
Thanks.
Looks like I've got several votes for expanding/extending this story. I'll add it to my stack, as I've got some other non-incest stories that probably deserve additional chapters first.
Just wow. Fucking genius. And for once I've been unable to fully imagine a concept in a story... That is just massive.
This is a genius idea. I would love to see where is goes, please continue!!!!
Don't see things like this very often so it's a breath of fresh air! Not to mention, totally hot!
Maybe a sequel?
5* for you.
I apologize for my English, is not my native language.
Holy shit that was the best orgasm I had sense my boyfriend left. That was a good story. Keep writing. Great story line.
Now that would be REALLY interesting😀 Course if it happened Now, I only hope it would reverse engineer me to be about 30 years old...since I'm 73...Oh well..Heh, Heh...
Your idea is an excellent one.
Somehow I felt you held yourself back. It could have been drawn out more, especially the sexual trysts, with a lot more details.
My only suggestion: In the pursuit of creative excellence, please do not second guess yourself. Just let it go. Whether people who read it like it or not, it will still be a creative piece of work that you have put your heart and soul into it.
Please continue to produce your excellent work.
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@getthephenom: No plans for a sequel, that I've thought of. I felt describing the impact the mutation was having on the world as a sufficient epilogue. Where would new drama come from?