All Comments on 'The Mind of a Teenager Ch. 04'

Please don't stop it here

Continue the story. Besides his teacher. I'd say there is unfinished business with Cara as well

Please continue with both the teacher and also the little sis. Also the potential for a 3some and even a story including the mother

This shouldn't be the end, there's a bunch of plotlines left unfinished. School for example, yeah, he punished them once but did they learn from it or not, the father being an ass, Cara basically wanting him on her own, then their mom not taking the shit and what comes of it, what happens with Lindsay from now on. Just to mention the most important ones.

There is a lot more you could do. Cara needs to be slowly brought in just so she can learn. Kyle needs to tell dad to stop cheating or tell him to leave. If dad leaves, then mom will need some dick. Teachers and girls at school need lessons taught. So, keep going. There are several grammar mistakes so get someone to proof read but overall I like your style.

MORE you just started

Please continue this story line it has so much more potential

Please continue..

Absolutely need more

Please get Someone to proof/edit.

Too abrupt of ending!!!!!

This was great you should do atleast one more part if not more

Spell check, please.

So many options here, but if you decide to go with another cast that’s ok. In any case, keep writing. A few typos, but overall great work.

5*

Tc

More please!

I think the storyline is really good but to go from good to great all of the grammar and spelling must be perfect. Please have your submission proofread before posting it here. All authors have editors, you will never catch all of your own mistakes. Don't be embarrassed or upset that your writing needs editing, many people will help all you have to do is ask.

I'd enjoy reading about all the women in his family getting in bed with him.

I love the story so far, it can't end here I would like to see what happens with Mrs. Johnston but also what happens with Cara as well as the possibility of the threesome with kyle and Lindsay and what becomes of their mother

More please, He should nudge Mrs. Johnston a bit each day for a week and get her wanting him. Then after getting some more experience enjoying other girls / staff at school, he should let Cara remember wanting to have sex, start one on one and aim towards bring both sisters together with him in one bed.

He should start a harem.....Have mom/Sis impregnated and teacher too.....

Please more

More please ??????

So, what happened to his mom cooking dinner?