All Comments on 'The Mission of the Heart'
by YoursTruly101
- 9 Comments
All_Shook_Upover 13 years agoThis wasn't that bad like the other comments suggest. I like that the storyline is interesting and new, but I'm wondering if you can make it erotic successfully.
LunaticLorraineover 13 years agoIm really enjoying this.
The other comments below were obviously looking for a story where it gets right to the sex.
Please continue this, I want to know where it will go. :)
Anonymousover 13 years agoI really enjoyed reading this. When you started describing Pamela I wondered if you were writing something that was supposed to be akin to Dark Angel and that character's story, but as I haven't much watched Dark Angel I don't really know. Seems like they might be similar, but I nonetheless like what you've come up with! I really want to read chapter two.
B5Rangerover 13 years agoPlease continue. You have me spellbound as to where this is going. Also, please continue your other story "Fighting for Her" as I was enjoying that story too. And no, not everything about a story has to be sex. A good story line will make any sex in the story that much better.
Anonymousover 9 years agoIt's too bad, decent story but the errors just killed it. Every paragraph had multiple grammatical errors and the author kept switching between 1st person present and 1st person past tense. It just made the whole thing almost unreadable.
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