All Comments on 'The Mountain Girl Ch. 01'

Thanks for writing. Looking forward to the next chapter.

to be starting another one of your stories. I already like the characters a lot, you always write so well.....

With gratitude and affection

Corinne xxxx

Great start to a new series. It looks very promising.

S32, you have delineated personable and believable characters dealing with real life issues. I am going to check out your other stories. Do you have any ebooks for sale? Amazon or wherever?

Wonderful start to this story, can't wait to see how things develop.

And can't wait for chapter 2!

I feel like a broken record, but here - great story, real situations, no suspension of disbelief involved. I enjoy how your protagonists are clearly different people with different tastes and attitudes; the stories have similarities but they're clearly not the same.

As usual, Shaima, you've produced a well-written and believable story. My one quibble with this is the over-reliance on pronouns, especially during lengthy passages of dialogue---"she this", "she that", "her the other" just gets a little confusing. Using character's names more frequently would improve matters.

IT HAS MERIT.

5🌟's

Another Shaima classic Melb plain earth story. Life turns on the smallest of gestures but the backstories are warmingly chatty, and gossipy. The thread is lesbian sort of but the feeling is family and busy friendship among mundane work life. I like this character Australian feel

Oh yes - back up the other comment - "she this", "she that" usage needs an edit; I got lost while they were doing the dishes...