All Comments on 'The Night'

I might have enjoyed the twist at the end if i were reading for macabre irony instead of erotica. Unfortunately, it just left a the rest of the story tainted.

This could use a follow-up but it must tie the beginning and the endpoint of this story together and make it all fit neatly together otherwise you will have lost the audience.

As som,eone currently dealing with prostate cancer, I may not nhyave qanj average or unbiased attitu8de. nYo0urs mixws aN EROTICD STORY WITH AN o hENRY TWIST. not A GOOD COMBINATIN. Write pone or the other.

Well done! The story itself was above average, but the unexpected ending and then the unexpected second ending were a great bonus.

I now want to read more of your work.