All Comments on 'The Night Before'

A clever, but in the end. a very silly story.

I found it to be a waste of time.

5 Stars from GW . Steve beat up Bill for me then I found out Steve had been doing Debbie too . 3 Marriages down the drain and i nailed someone's wife and showed him het Panties while he was in jail . And yes i was just as confused as this guy as I had no idea what was going on . I had 2 cousins in jail at the time and they said hi to Bill and Steve for me . Got to love family at times

Pretty hilarious, but I would appreciate more alliteration.😲

What the hell happened to the rest of the story????????????????

Jeez, I think I would have a better chance of understanding the Codex Gigas in Braille than I do of understanding this story. I think the word

“convoluted” comes to mind.

I’m still pretty sure it’s a good story though, so thanks for sharing, HDK. I’ll try it again soon after I’ve had a couple of beers, maybe it’ll make more sense then.

I thought it was funny as hell. The detective at the hospital stopping to grab a donut sounded about right. The affirmative action line was right on target too. His boss and his brother-in-law doing his lawyer wife sounded about right as well (it IS the LW forum).

So is Jeff Tessa's brother, or her brother in law? Just asking as it was pointed out both ways. Or did Tessa have another sister that was married to Jeff? No matter what, that's a hell of a pot hole.

A fun, quick, clever romp!

Horrible story

Very good!

Who's on first.......

"I suppose it was affirmative action since she never told him "no"."

""Are you referring to Roberta, or Tessa?""

Obviously Roberta !

5*

Too shirt/ incomplete ending

I have no idea why people think this is funny. All I found it was tedious.

Absolutely Hilarious! A totally wonderful "who's on first" tale. Five stars!!!

I feel a little dizzy trying to keep up, but another 5* story from a master story teller

Great story. Deliberately confusing.

I'm tempted to ask you to finish the story, but won't because of all the idiots around who would tell you that seriously.

Jeez, my head is still spinning from that ‘who’s doing who’ explanation of what happened. If it was me I think I would just go back to the Motel Eight for a month or two and let things settle down a bit.

terrific story and a great finish. 5 stars

Too complicated, cant follow who's doing who.

What we have here is a failure to communic..... I guess someone else already used that line. What we have here is a great demonstration of peak sarcasm. The champion is in our midst. Great job, hdk. 5*

detroitdave

Z 2 B CONTINUED PLEASE

Funny .The Forrest Gump of business, or in shock. The last sentence indicates shock. Kinda slow though.

How about the future Clueless CEO as the subtitle.

""Damn it, Marge! Tessa and Jack could have both been shot by Roberta!"

So, why is Frank getting upset that Tess and Jack could have been shot by Roberta? A funeral is a hell of a lot cheaper than a divorce! Not to mention the insurance payout in case of Tessa's untimely demise.

Most excellent convoluted tale

No, I was doing Tessa, along with your mom and the copy machine. Really fun story but far too short.

Third time. I think I finally get it.

funny as hell

😂😂😂😂😂😂

Fuck, this was funny as hell, I laughed a lot

last sentence bumped the rating up 1`*to 4*

Did some of you skip the opening paragraphs, which are actually the end/conclusion/what happened after? The final sentence is hilarious! A perfect segue back to the opening. Fun story, HDK!

Again Played like a Fool.

Needs a. continuation of what happened next. As stands, the story’s incomplete & my downgraded rating adheres to that point. 2 stars; should’ve been at least 3. — Bob

This story screams for more story. You stopped way short of your talent. I really liked what you wrote already. It needs more.

Good story, just a little short on the ending.

LOL, last lines

Good story line, confusing, moves too fast and never really ends. i went with 4 stars because yes it needs to be longer and havea real finish but what was written had great detail, I could almost smell the copper odor to the blood on the leather couch

Ha! That was great. BTW, I hate the name Tessa.

"The last man on Earth sat alone in a room. There was a knock on the door ..."

It's called "use your imagination", if you even have one. A story does not need to be cradle to the grave and 20 pages long. I weep for the species.

another incomplete story.

why the hell people like & high rate stories of this author?????????????

For sheer outrageousness, five stars. I don't want to know or live near any of these people.

You are one clever storyteller!

Solid Gold! "Now, who's on first?"

Original and funny. 5*.

Kudos, Finally!

A truly original and well-written story. 5 stars, thank you. And thanks to Shakespeare who most likely inspired this story with his sage and pithy "What tangled webs we weave ..."

You attract some of the strangest readers. lee5456 - which of the two pages did you miss reading? The story was done with page two. Anonymous, just before lee, I'm not sure what story that you were commenting on but it couldn't have been this one. Thank you HDK!

Funny but damn hard to follow who was doing who. I can't imagine how you kept it straight while writing! Thank you for a unique and good story.

somewhere east of Omaha

This is a great story! Very funny!

Couldn't even finish the fucking story

What I call a useless HDK story. It has no form.

Another great story!

The PPS spread sheet would have come in handy here!

Another gem from HDK.

OR AN INCOMPLETE. WHERE'S THE REST OF THE STORY. 3* AT BEST FOR A GOOD BEGINNING WITHOUT THE ENDING.

Is it difficult to sit down with that stick up there?

OK that was funny too. Or were you serious?

Hilarious!

Read it again, this time It flowed a little better. I still had to read it twice.

This was a good start to a story. Wheres the rest of it? Half a story only gets half a score.

I guess this is supposed to be humorous or satire or a farce? Quite frankly I just found it irritating. No one writes an idiot main character better than Hard Day's Night for some reason I guess people like that sort of thing

I am pretty sure I know the identity of the detective, or at least must be family of the one I am thinking about.

Love it!

Loved it!

I had a friend that was really smart but life just sort of happened to him like our hero in this great story. Loved to watch him get into all kinds of shit doing the right thing, and then come out smelling like roses, like our hero in this great story. Another 5*s for one of my favorites.

detroitdave

This story is an example of where I believe HDK really shines, with the protagonist wearing a Charley Chaplin bemused expression as chaos erupts all around him.

I had to guess there was cheating, but the way it came together was just too good not to enjoy. Thank you for that!

Revenge and punishment by luck of draw

Don't have to be smart just lucky

Good story although he doesn't come out too smart

4 stars

Just absolutely loved it! LOL

Tessa, I guess! Very funny skit and leave 'em laughing.

Yeah, lots of names to keep straight, but once that is accomplished this is a pretty good story; and that "affirmative action" line is worth the price of admission. This is a fiver.

This story gave.me.a.headache, but.it was great. Funny as Red Skelton.

Very humorous an entertaining. 5

Well, if you've read HDK's stories, you should be aware that he has the awareness of the white collar world of a career dishwasher.

Jack and Roberta sound like a joke and the idiot that takes over is Frank? A CEO that follows American Idol, makes silly impressions during a crisis and all the cliche stupid lines some 12 year old would make. Marge was the only one that wasn't retarded, but then she only had a few lines, so who knows.

That is a very witty line

Great dialog. *****

Hilarious! I wonder if anyone is really that vacuous? 5*****

I loved it great read and had me laughing y ass off

Great job

.. but this was a wonderful twist on Loving Wives. The narrator's confused utterances was a major part of my enjoyment. To all those naysayers, if you don't like a story, especially anon naysayers, (I mean >really< don't like it) then do what one of the great authors here once said - just do not vote. I applaud the authors who give us stories to read (and everyone needs to start somewhere - perfection takes time and practice). The only reason I signed on here was to give a name to the few comments I make. I wish I had found this story years ago. That so many readers like me have found this story years after it was published - and have commented favorably to it - is a testament to the quality of the writing. To HardDaysKnight, thank you for a great story. ( Incidentally: Was it too short? No - the absence of the winding up of what happened to him, him, her, them etc. etc. was the right thing - all these extra bits would have been superfluous and, to my mind at least, could have compromised the quality of the whole. )

5*****.

Brava Brava

You have written some good stories! Sometimes it is fun to figure out where da ell we r heading. Usually a fun trip! Encore!

AWESOME Thank you for a wonderful story of humor and entertainment. I will read again and take notes re cast of characters.

this calls for closure what happened when the dust/blood settled ?

by Abbott & Costello (Third Base). Thank for this hilarious skit. 5*.

God what a relief to find a decent non cuck story to read even if I'm 8 years late. A good short amusing tale from one of the best writers on this site. Tried to give it a 5 but somehow it came out as a 4, sorry HDK it deserves a 5.

what happened to the reporter? what was Marge's reaction, etc.

A little confusing to follow 'who was up who' and the whole delivering the pearls scenario, but really amused with the light-hearted approach. Thanks HDK.

A little difficult to follow just who was f#*$ing who, but really enjoyed the light-hearted approach. Thanks HDK.

dumb shit.

Just what I needed!

Thanks!

Shades of the Keystone Cops, what a tangled affair.

Especially the happy ending.

The story is funny and really sarcastic, but the ending really cracked me up! Still smiling... my cheeks hurt!

Jack's doin' Tessa who's doin' Jeff who's doin' Roberta who's doin' Marge who's doin' Jack who's doin' Jeff who's doin' ....FUCK!!! I can't keep up with all that!!

It was a somewhat humorous story but JFK (Jiminy Fucking Kricket), who was doing

who, and who could keep up with all that? 3 Stars for the effort.

Thanks, a smile all the way through.

This had it all. This story can be used to instruct writers on how to write an entertaining story. You seem to be a Feast or Famine writer. Either 1-Star and scathing comments from readers; or 5-stars, your story selected as a Favorite Story, and the highest praises possible. Love you or hate you, they will not forget you!

Way to funny!!! Lol.

This was actually a pretty good story. I enjoyed reading it. However, I wish you could have stuck with it and had more to it. somethings like what happened to all the assholes that went to the hospital, what he did do with his whore wife in regards to revenge. In fact revenge to the brother-in-law as well as his dipshit boss. minor things like that. anyway 5 stars to you.

Just read it again. How much hilarity can you pack into two pages? All that talent, wasted on a man! You're my guy.<3

I nearly laughed my ass off. I can just see something like this actually happening.