All Comments on 'The Nutcracker Blizzard'

Hi,

I would have given this more, however your writing needs some serious work. Your spelling leaves something to be desired, (there/their, etc), you drop in and out of tense, (were/are), and much of your dialogue reads as though it was computer generated.

An evening writing course is highly recommended - you will improve out of sight. (Trust me, I'm a published author)

Good luck,

LRK

Hot and erotic. Thank You. Ronnie W.

this has the elements of a great story such as How did it happen or it was totally unexpected. all stories are about great sex but the best part is how did you get there.