All Comments on 'The Office Visit'

Thank you. You are good at this .please continue writing . Gramps52

Please, please, please. Thank you.

Kind of confusing. You have way too many gaps.

crap

For the read.

A bit of silly romantic rubbish

2/5

The best writing allows the reader to imagine, to be creative. If you want all the details go to a technical manual.

Thanks, for leaving me space to imagine.

Bold piece of writing. I love this. I had to back up a couple of times to keep track of who was talking, but that's okay, because the overall dialogue heavy style is so direct and dynamic. Kinda exhausting, but the brevity of the story makes it work. Like an action sequence in a movie. Thanks

That is a serious piece of writing and I enjoyed it

CLM

I must be really hard to please. Who or what type of name is D? Silly trying to read about a capital letter being a person.

Kinda hard to go from young love to grandparent in twenty years. Thirty plus makes more sense. Really enjoyed the dialogue though. Felt like natural conversation.

Also D&C isn't a sterilization. Just a 'minor procedure' (no procedure involving anesthesia is completely safe) to remove 'unwanted tissue' from a uterus. Anything from removing fibroids to an abortion. If she was healthy and wasn't pregnant there wouldn't have been any point in doing it.

you cant do a D&C on someone who isnt pregent

and why would the dean of a school have the athority to force a student to have an abortion

also he knows they didnt have sex so why would he care

also if she had secret sex with someone other than him why would he still want her unless he was a cuck

also 20+18=les than forty and therefore not mature

My wife’s had a D&C a few times for fibroid removal & she wasn’t pregnant.

I can’t see where that was any threat unless they were going to do more nefarious things when she was under.

I enjoyed it 4 stars worth.

Bill

That's the only title I'd give this effort. Hard to read and ultimately not worth the effort. 2*

Pretty much perfect for me. It's fiction so the "facts" are whatever you want them to be but the style and approach, minimalist and not overt works very well.

Here's a fact. A girl-friend of mine let me know that she'd just had her first orgasm. She was 45, dated a lot and loved sex, but it still took all that time. So it happens, but not usually on Lit.

A good little story. Could have been a bit longer but anyway, AAAA++++

Short and sweet is so hard to do! Congrats on a job well done!

This is a partial repeat of another one of your stories. I don't appreciate the recycling. The first was good but this one is hardly worth 2* because of the recycling.

BJ

A good short version of the complete story. Read "I think you are my dad" by the same author. Then you will understand and appreciate this short version.