All Comments on 'The Orphans'

where was the sci fi this was more for the first time section.

I hope so. I'll be waiting. Thank you for sharing.

+redlion75, I was debating on weather or not to put this into the first times section or the fantasy section, eventually I chose fantasy due to the possibilities of sequels.

And +Sid0604, of course! If I find that even a few people enjoy my style of writing, i'd be more than happy to create sequels bolstered with a lot more detail.

You just might want to have someone else read over it and edit prior to submission next time. There were some spots that could have flowed a bit better. Was overall enjoyable though.

+Anonymous, thank you for the feedback, but sadly I have nobody else to pass these by. I'm currently in the making of part 2 (which should be done rather soon) and i'll read it over a few more times hopefully catching some of the errors and adding to the flow.