All Comments on 'The Park'

YOur story was cute, however it was totally ruined by extremely poor word choices and spelling.

I would suggest that you use a grammar checker and spell checker prior to submitting another story.

The choices of words was out of context such as insult instead of assault which would have been more approrpiate.

The basic premise of the story was excellent.

Unbelievable, simplistic, wooden.

Lacks emotion, and credibility.