All Comments on 'The Pee Tape'

Lot's of interesting, well developed characters, seeking a bit of unusual pleasure. Bordering on unqualified debachery, a full-on perversion fetish. Like slurping perversion from the the tap.

I guess I'm just saying it was pretty hot. Well done.

Clever writing, very funny, and ultimately very sexy. But those names were outrageous - Talia Deifendeifer et al. Where on earth did those come from!

Great story. Keep them coming. Can feel the sexual tension in the air

This is top grade smut, and some of your prose is downright outrageously good.

"The acorn of nausea in Rufus's gut exploded into a towering oak tree of quease, its gnarled crown burgeoning into his brain, its exuberant foliage blotting out his reason."

I'm not sure if you're supposed to offer any critique in these comments, but I would say that the juxtaposition of a phrase like that with the use of the word "boobies" multiple times is a little jarring. Your language is really descriptive and sensuous but that took me out of it a bit.

Anyway, great job.

Funny, filthy, and inventive, with a wide vocabulary -- exactly the way I like my smut! Those names were fascinating, too. Well done.

Very funny indeed even on reread. Thanks.

I want more of this story. : )

I truly love your storytelling. I hope that you continue to write and share your stories here.

You should make a story about Talia and Jerene after this incident. Maybe Talia and Jerene do this on the low and Talia was so drunk she was out if it. Jerene clearly enjoyed herself