All Comments on 'The Perverted Headmaster Ch. 01'

Yes, absolutely, expand, please :)

This was so so hot

It’s hot, but you need to proofread. I get the writing style you’re going for but you aren’t nailing it. The flowery language combined with incorrect grammar make your story difficult to read at times. Try putting it through something like grammarly. The free version is great and would probably help a lot.

This is the kind of story I would like to get immersed in - and get off to. I can’t do that when I have to keep pausing to try to figure out what you’re saying.

Nicely done - erotic and well put together. There were a few errors, but not enough to spoil the read (and I’m a fairly pedantic editor!), so I don’t really agree with the previous comment. Grammarly is great, but would partially remove the somewhat Victorian headmaster style you’re trying to create, so use with care.

Pls keep this fic going!

Just what Daddy ordered! Did the trick beautifully! Thank you.

Looking forward to seeing where your mind takes us on this!

It made me come without touching just by reading about her great orgasm