by candyman666
But -- boy, do you need an editor. Typos. Poor punctuation. So distracting that, frankly, I couldn't get past page 2.
Really enjoyed that, thank you. Well written, flowed nicely. Looking forward to the next bit.
I really enjoyed this, a lovely romantic adventure, nicely written. I use an editor to polish my stories, most people do.. I'm off to read part 2. leggielibby x
I liked this, yes there were a few errors in spelling and grammar, but none of us are perfect and most are amateur writers. I also understand you now have an editor so well done.
The story itself flowed nicely and depicted a very nice May December romance turning into a long lasting supportive friendship. I'm different from your main character in that I'm not a fan of anal but have no problem with my own cum and a nice bush, there again each to their own.