All Comments on 'The PI Who Knew Too Much Ch. 03'

Errata (Latin for "Proofread better, dipshit!")

under furled eyebrows ==> under furrowed eyebrows

pictures on the , all ==> pictures on the walls, all

It's really annoying waiting weeks for new chapters.

It still reads better with odd typo than most of the shit on here 😀 Like this little dime pi story....Thank you.

Good yarn! Keep it coming.

5

Come on, come on... I want to keep reading.

great story, dont know why it is in LW given he isnt married or screwing a married woman

I have to agree that if the chapters don’t come closer together I will not be continuing. I don’t want to reread the previous chapter every time you post a new one. It’s nice but it is not that compelling.

A great 'tec story. Keep it coming, please!

Write a book so I can keep reading until I finish it. I'm hooked and like Mr. Brooks, I don't like waiting for the next chapter. Good stuff.

This is really some good work.

Suspense, humor and good writing.

It may have short chapters,

but this is top shelf stuff.

Well done A_B!

Top ratings from me.

The story is okay. But why loving wives? Also what year is this crime drama taking place. There is no way his is able to live on the small amount of money he makes or has and a secretary to boot. Is this 1940 .

So the year of your story. Is probably 1956, or could be 1960. Both years were presidential election years, so that would pertain to your comment about the winner of the election. Eisenhower was president, Mamie was first lady for both of those years. He is driving a 48 Merc and a 56 or newer Triumph T6 since 56 was the first year of the T6. He is still writing with a fountain pen, the first ball point pan was 1946 and was about $10. By 1959 they were down to about $0.59 so that sort of leans towards 1956. Superman was on TV from 1952 to 58, which would put the edge towards 56 again. The only thing that keeps me from 56 is the triumph what is a used motorcycle. I like your writing, very good story

he doesn't put too much empphasis on security or longevity. TK U MLJ LV NV

Well written as usual. Nice set up. I’ll await the Humphrey, Peter and cast ending.

I really hate having to reread previous chapters to getup to speed for the latest posting due to the loooong delay between postings.

Well done, so far.

Others have commented on the problem of time lag between chapters. As there are so many serial stories on Literotica, it is difficult to remember all the critical details from the earlier chapters of each serial being followed by the reader.

I found the short introduction in this chapter to be helpful, but insufficient.

Points that would have helped in a full synopsis for Ch.03:

- It's set in the 1950s

- Lorelei hired Spector to do surveillance on her husband, accountant Charles

- He finds Charles murdered in his office

- He tells Lorelei, who shoots him and nearly kills him

- While in hospital, he learns from his friendly cop that Lorelei has now also been murdered

- He returns to Charles' office and discovers a secret compartment with a passport for Samuel Barlow (who looks suspiciously like Charles), a bundle of C-notes and a journal

Maybe for Ch.04, AB? Please?

Lue

Ps. I'm still liking it, nonetheless.

Love the humor, the writing, and the characters. Installments are nicely bite-sized.

A great read and very entertaining, love it.

Intriguing enough to continue

Reminds Me of Mickey S and Mike Hammer