by sexygirl76
This was an okay read. I'd like to know how even a boy scout can start a fire by rubbing two wet sticks together in the middle of a downpour.
Talk about an unexpected ending! I don't even know what to think about it.
This one, though, has his "Dead" merit badge.
Loved the ending. Kinda reminded me of something my grandpop said, that heaven is a place on earth where you live like you want to live.
WELL YOU WERE GREAT GUNS TIL THE LAST CHAPTER THEN YOU FUCK UP
YOU MAKE A ALMOST BELIEVEABLE STORY INTO A PIECE OF SHIT, I HAD A NICE HARD-ON COMING UP TIL THE LAST CHAPTER THEN IT FELL ABOUT AS FAST AS THE PLANE,I GIVE YOU 4STARS ONLY BECAUSE OF THE FIRST PART OF THIS STORY THE LAST PART YOU GET 0 STARS........................R.......................
This has to be the lamest attempt at erotic fiction I've ever read.
This story was not great in my opinion. If you are going to write, write what you know or research it if you don't. It's not hard to Google planes so that you don't write something that makes no sense.
Then we have the island itself. They are dead we find out at the end, and yet are able to get cold, be rained on and somehow start a fire as well. And that is amazing not only because they are dead but are doing it with soaking wet wood, no tinder and only two sticks to rub together.
Lastly the ending of the story the two of them find their dead bodies on the beach and instead of being shocked they decided to fuck on the beach while two people pull their mangled bodies out of the plane-wreck. I mean, really? This whole story made less sense than โLostโ did, and with a worse ending, which is tough to achieve.
On the plus side the writing standard is fairly good, and a lot better than some authors on here. I have read better from this writer though, and so will just put this down as a โLostโ inspired nightmare. :)
To the stupid anonymous people that leave comments: the story does not have to make "sense", it is a story. If you don't like it, don't read it. If you want to make negative comments, then at least have the balls to leave your name and not be cowardly. These kind of comments come from people who couldn't write a story if they had to.
I only read the start. Why would anyone even think of their daughter that way? Completely gross.
To = in the directi9on of. As in going to fuck.
Too = excessively. As in after fucking too much, her pussy was sore.
Two = The number 2
When the reader has to figure out what the writer is trying to say, it makes the story line too hard to follow.