All Comments on 'The Poker Game Ch. 01: Ante Up'

Well that was an enjoyably start, looking forward to reading more.

... if you can write a story like this as your first attempt! Very well done, stealth311, and welcome to Literotica. I am looking forward to reading much more soon. Five star!

Excellent writing for a first effort. The sub's nervousness about the evening and her interplay with her Dom/boss are a welcome change of pace from the usual uber-sub, and shows how uneasily such a relationship builds. The instruction sheet was a nice touch, giving us a foreshadowing of future events and showing the nature of the Dom. I'm looking forward to seeing how the evening progresses.

My Master has considered having a party like this for his friends several times. You have captured my every emotion about the prospect, both pro and con. Very well done! I look forward to reading chapter 2!

Going straight to page 2 after that scenesetter....

It was a very good start to your story. It was very comprehensive and flowed really well. I did find a couple of things that I thought were odd, like her being punished for expressing her fears/ concerns regarding the upcoming poker game? That just seemed really bizarre. I know trust is important but it just seems bizarre that she was punished for a genuine concern, it made him seem really cold and uncaring. The other odd thing was her talking to herself in the third person?

I noticed that this seems to be a DD/ LG relationship, I know a lot of people derive a great deal of pleasure from that kind of relationship but it’s really really not my thing so I’ll bow out from here.

Good luck with your writing.

Tess (UK)