All Comments on 'The Preacher Man'

A few major errors are: You can't feel the cervix through the skin, fat and muscle, but most of all the bladder is in the way and you can't feel through that!! And an orgasm doesn't open the cervix!! Only giving Birth opens and flattens the cervix (or surgery using dilators, to remove tumours or fibroids or for an ERPC op) And she is 4 months pregnant and opening (if she could) the cervix would make her miscarry the Foetus!! So in the middle of nowhere in a tent, she opens her cervix with an orgasm so the protagonist can put his cock there to ejaculate into the Uterus which is occupied by a 4 month old Foetus?!! And so after that I stopped reading about the psdo Islamic society, Post Nuclear war and started Re-reading "Dune" after watching the film (part 1) and going to see part 2. The director has beefed up the women's characters and I hope he goes on to do "Dune Messiah" the 2nd book. And even though written in the '60s and on LSD, Frank Herbert is still very relevant today and a great, great, great deal better than this mess. Good luck getting a publisher, tho Amazon will publish anyone. *Anony-mouse*

Having just read this for the second time, I’m pleased to say I haven’t changed my opinion. A absolutely effin’ brilliant piece of work. I cannot imagine how long this took to write. The plot planning and reference notes most run to dozens of pages to keep the author on point. I did find the times and calendar references a little too detailed for my tastes - but so what, I skimmed the odd paragraph and avoided date/time overload. I hope the author finds his just rewards by publishing and getting a buck for his bang.

Simply brilliant. The complexity beggars belief. Take away most of the naughty bits, and this should surely be a sci-fi TV series to top them all. I just loved it, start to finish!

I couldn’t stick it out past half-way. At first I was really interested, but the super technical world-building and never-ending details about locations just got to me. The women are one-dimensional and the sex scenes entirely forgettable. The story has all kinds of potential, but needed so much less technical detail and more character development.

This story is an incredible one of a kind work with fantastic writing and immense world building. It appears to be a phenomenally accurate account of a hypothetical post-apocalyptic pseudo-islamic theocracy.

The sexual nature of the work was a bit lacking but not enough to detract from the work.

The detractor was the characters. They appeared more as caricatures than real people, particularly the female ones. While I applaud the effort of the main character to over come the evils in that world, the inaccurate portrayal of females was glaring. Women are not the innocent "worker bees" expressed in the story.

Overall, I am extraordinary grateful to the author for their efforts and for the story. I was sad to give it up halfway through because so much of the story was fantastic.

Sincerely, a grateful reader

Author is a genius. This is top notch story telling, as I'm sure the author himself/herself knows better than even the better tv shows and movies in pop culture.

Bravo.

Best imagination with worst main characters.

It's amazing that the story is based on love, but it is very strange. The weirdest story I've ever read. I hate the sexist tone/message that almost all men are evil. Overly self-indulgent and very predictable. Some of the sex scenes were revolting (in addition to being weird/cringey).

This was astonishingly good classic science fiction. It took me most of a 24 hour day to read, with breaks for cooking and watch a couple shows with my wife. (I am not the fastest reader. I decided I would not sleep until I finished reading it. This really should be a regularly released novel. I have read most of the classic science fiction series, and a lot of what came out in 80s and 90s. It is at least as good or better than 70% of the 80s and 90s professionally published novels I have bread.

I read this story years ago and really enjoyed it. The sex is hot and I still come back and visit certain scenes semi regularly, but the overall story and it's world building is really what makes this story stick out in my memory.

Over the years, my perception has shifted from appreciating the heroes journey of one man changing society to be more open, to appreciating how even in it's initial state the world of preacherman had already accomplished something wonderful and seemingly impossible by todays standards.

The abolishment of capitalism and it's hunger for endless growth, the stable society where people have their basic needs met and have access to public transportation, this seems like a paradise compared to todays world. When I picture what a post capitalist society looks like, this story often springs to my mind (except without the misogyny and the state hierarchy). People have tons of free time and are not working 100+ hours to provide ever increasing profits for their bosses, third world countries are not being sabotaged and oppressed and exploited by western nations to keep the capitalist machine fed. Through technology and a lack of expectation of endless growth, people live their lives content and fulfilled (except for the female half of the population, but that was fixed by the end of the story so kudos!)

TLDR: Great story, I am glad that I found it.

the sex scene is lacking, it just feels like afterthought

This story is beyond what I expected from literotica. I've read amazingly good reads- 'The Preacher Man' takes quality to a new level. I'll be remembering this one forever.

Well fucking done. A truly amazing story that had me reading page-after-page for two days.

I found Literotica as a teenager. Really strange to say that rather than finding the usual erotica, I found the best piece of fiction I had ever read. Nearly 15 years have passed, and I find that my viewpoint has not changed. I almost never visit Literotica these days, but this one story has captivated my imagination all my adult life, and I am an avid reader of sci-fi and fantasy. This really should have been a mainstream novel.

Third time read? Fourth time read?

Like the others, I think this should have managed to be a mainstream book. Erotica, schmerotica, get it to a publicist.

I so much appreciate the effort and research to keep the book consistent, from patterns of numbers, to geography and time zones, and even the harder bits of science fiction --- plenty of jargon was used, of course, but I was astonished when, for instance, other than the magic bits about harmonics, the explanations of fusion cross sections and the math for total power outputs were textbook correct. The author is smart, creative, and dedicated, and I hope their True Holy is treating them well.

Epic in scale and amazing in detail. I have read this many times over the years. I also enjoy his "Kinetic:

What an amazing story!

Absolutely captivating. I read this story years ago and came back to find it just as good as the first time I read it. Thank you, thank you soooo much

What a fabulous story, original concept and so hopeful. I sometimes wish humanity would find a better way forward, unfortunately the very spectrum of our natures holds us back. Stories like this should be read more, because of the hope they can engender.

the best!

I've been a reader of Literotica for approximately a decade and in that time I've never commented on a story but I felt compelled to on this one because this is undoubtedly the finest story I've read on this website, let alone one of the finest I've read outright.

Apart from an approximately 1 hour break for breakfast, coffee and a run, I read the whole thing in one 8 hour sitting between 4:30am and 12:30pm because I couldn't put down my phone.

I see that the author hasn't published a story on here for more than a decade for whatever reason and although that's a shame to see, I would just like to express my sincere thanks to them for creating such a wonderful piece of work that has truly touched me, as well as many others.

Onto The Preacher's Daughter.

I loved your story. I am mostly joking about the warning label, but I did have to stop to go to bed. Luckily this wasn't one of the those nights where I decided to read a quick story or two before joining my husband for post erotica activities--he would have been very disappointed since this story was so addicting!

Please publish this,and more stories. It is so good!!

Listen I don’t comment here because we all know why we’re here. But this isn’t some smut story. This is truly a novella masterpiece worth publishing. The complex world created from our own is absolutely amazing

I have just recently discovered this author and I am sad to learn he has not posted on over 10 years. If anyone has any information please share it. If this author has passed away or continued onto official publications would be nice to know. Either way this js single handedly the best story I have read here on Lit, and perhaps one of the best stories I have read ever.

I don't usually leave a comment after I've read something here but this is not just some erotic novel, this should be a fully published novel sitting on my own bookshelf.

Truly amazing read!

Kudos to you Hammingbyrd7!

So happy to reread this, years after the first time!

I agree wholeheartedly with the other comments: this could -and should- be a published novel.

Great world-building, character development and varied storytelling!

Thank you for creating and sharing this!

Once again, the story of the The Preacher Man amaze me. It's a wonderfull story!

A most intriguing story, making it was hard to stop reading when things I needed to do at home came up. I couldn't see how Ilias was going to change the world in just a few chapters, however it was well more than just a few chapters and seemed to go on and on and but I had to continue reading until the end. I like the story yet found the use of all the coordinates of locations and other details a little superfluous and finally just skipped over them when they became so repetitious. I understand that the author felt they were needed but I felt they didn't contribute to the actual story. Maybe I missed something important by doing that, but I still enjoyed the story.

Excellent tale with well developed characters and a story arc. The fact the sex was incidental to the story and didnt overwhelm it was amazing. Thank You.

I've been reading and rereading this story on and off again for over a decade now, and it still fails to disappoint. Engaging characters, a rich nuanced world, a light hand with the erotica and a distinct beginning middle and ending, this remains one of the finer examples of work on this site.

Also because I can't help starting shit, @Crusader235, dude, could you cool it with the political/religious demagoguery, I don't need your Facebook/Fox news interpretation of Islam when I'm browsing a jerk off site. The religion portrayed in the piece isn't Islam anymore than a handmaid's tale is about Calvinism. It just uses some of the language, much as Western society still utilises Greek or Latin words, or idioms that make no sense to the average experience of people living in the modern world.

This should absolutely be a published novel. It's a believable story with amazing attention to detail. I'm an editor at heart, and I can count on two hands the typos I found. Seriously, send this to someone if you haven't already!

Truly one of the best on Literotica, so well written, and detailed. Assorbing the reader into a possible future terrifying world. It remains a islamic fairy tale, where women are sex slaves, and breed stock for ten thousand years, (8k + 2k before the war). Oh, let's not forget the purging, (killing), of undesirables, and non believers. The author says this is a new species of human in his story, I say it's just an upgrade of the same old Islamic terrorist. I gave this story five stars because it is so well written, even if the content appalled me.

I read most of the comments, and wondered how many was from women readers. I suspect by the time a woman read a few pages she was disgusted, and stopped reading. Maybe after WWIII, this will be the world we deserve.

Very sexist, religious (islam???) quite a gruesome tale, but having said that, very well written

When I saw the description as being "a global theocracy " I thought this would be another midwife/evil Christian patriarchy story. You've clearly done a lot of research of the caliphate's and ottomon empires, the latter especially known for meritocracy (at least initially) and the religion of Islam itself. I was constantly and increasingly impressed with how you able to make a believable scenario, with a system that greatly benefits and helps many, but oppresses and harms at the same time (practically every government system has this, no system or institution of government is purely good or evil and constantly struggles with challenges and moral dilemas, but so so often in stories you just see either Nazi or Catholic like cookie cutter villians who are barely believable.) It was great you used a religion as the part of the part of the plot, not an evil straw man, or addressed that the world is still going through problems at the end of the story, and I yeah. Can't say it enough, I'm super impressed. I started reading this at like 5 am and finished at like 3, great work and this the kind of content I go on this website for. Amazing work .

Without a doubt, one of the most phenomenal stories I have read anywhere... ever.

Thank you for this wonderfull storry. I loved every moment!

I just spent the majority of today's free time reading this, and what a pleasure it has been! I'm very fortunate to have stumbled upon your work. Thank you!

Dear Sir/Madam

Have you even read the first couple pages of this story yet?

If not so, please just read the entire page 5.

This story is obviously agaibst it, in the entire story the main character climbs up the letter to fight the messed up system he was born into.

I really enjoyed this masterpiece, in my opinion you should at least understand what is going on in this story.

What is this fucking drivel?

A pro Islam pro Sharia story? A story of Islam taking over the world and ruling for thousands of years? Seriously? Give me a fucking break. And it's a hall of fame story? Are you people out of your god damn minds?

Stories like this pop up, once in a while, and are a real pleasure.

How glued I was to every world and event. Truly wonderful skills and thought must have gone into this.

What a wonderful story. Really beautifully written.

Such an amazing piece of work. I congratulate the author on achieving this masterpiece.

"How is it possible? Abigail once told me a man named Thomas Edison invented the incandescent light, years before James Maxwell developed the field equations for light."

I don't know if / how many other readers have noted this, but--

I believe Maxwell collaborated with Faraday in the 1860's to explain the link between electricity and magnetism. I believe the first equations were published in early 1860's - almost 20 years before the invention of the incandescent bulb.

Maxwell died about the time Edison patented the bulb.

Just a simple question. Hiw can I give this 10 stsrs?

This is surely book material.

This is absolutely amazing!

The world building here is extraordinary! Thank you so much for this.

Read this over a long period of time and enjoyed every moment of it such an amazing piece worthy of all praise I could possibly give it thanks for the journey

One of the best.

Great story - very well developed plot, very different concept .

Thanks for sharing it .

This is a really well-developed story and futuristic world. Have you thought about getting this story published?

I read this here years ago and decided I wanted to reread it. It was a little hard to find but I managed, and I am glad I did.

It's not without flaws, but is also very reminiscent in style of James Tiptree Jr and Gene Wolfe, two powerhouses in world building and scope.

I am going to suggest some different from what others are saying. Don't publish this as it is; collaborate to get it turned into a graphic novel. I think that would work really well.

Ain't nobody got time for that

Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant!

Thank you.

Having read a lot of material from this site, this is without doubt amongst the best that I have seen. The pace and plot really caught and held me to the end. Great, great writing.

Best story I've read. 10/10

This was one of the most beautiful stories I've ever read. Truly it was awesome.

Seriously, just a little editing, and some added details here in there where others have suggested, and this story would do very well on the Kindle!

I enjoyed the details of location and sun times, because it showed a thought out story and also the way of thinking that was important in that world and to Ilias.

I do agree the wives could be described more throughout the story, like Chanah's freckles!

Amazing concept of male compassion overcoming cruelpatriarchy. The sweet tenderness and sensuality of lovemaking with the attitude of caring for an equal. And an incredible ending. Found numeric explananations a little boring after a while. Thanks so much.

I cried

Thank you for sharing!

A bit of criticism to balance out all the blind praise for this story.

- The attention to detail is in the entirely wrong place, several paragraphs are spent discussing geographic locations and sunsets, when it is not relevant to the story in any way. This severely hampers the pace of the story. Similarly, important moments such as the civil war are almost completely glossed over and never impact the protagonists in any way.

- After 46 pages I could not describe any of the female characters in this story. They have little to no personality beyond what skill they can bring to his super-harem. They also all like the protagonist? They serve more as a deus ex machina production line than anything important.

- On the subject of deus ex machina, it is abused heavily throughout to get the protagonist out of tough situations. He rarely faces much hardship that the reader can experience.

- The world building is immensely detailed, but ultimately wasted as many of these elements are not worked into the narrative, or serve much of a purpose. This is a front laden story, where many of these details on the structure and purpose of the ruling order are never utilized.

- There are no central antagonists beyond a vague construction implied by the world building. The antagonistic force is simply a faceless, nameless system which is never examined in any depth beyond what kind of symbol the different ranks get.

- The pacing is terrible, as I said earlier the detail paid to certain areas is strange. I don't know why I need to know the exact geographic location of our next locale, especially considering the short time spent at each one. This story is 46 pages long and I can say that nothing much happened in it beyond killing some bears and I think a temple blew up?

- This world is a strange and alien place, but the reader never sees any of it. A core component of the sci-fi fantasy genre is completely missing here.

- The protagonist himself is a strange, featureless blob who also lacks any real defining personality beyond his selfless actions and his photographic memory. He has no real motivations beyond that he's a super nice guy who is different to the rest, meaning he feels directionless, just going from one thing to the other as he climbs the ranks.

All in all, contrary to what everybody else is saying; I don't think this would get published, unless there's a large market of people who find needless detail exciting. It's impressive, a level of dedication seldom seen on Literotica, but as an actual narrative it falls flat. The characters are dull, the writing is packed with unimportant detail, and nothing interesting ever seems to happen.

so much imagination, so well written, totally captivating.

from your story i would take it that you are from the Islam faith good job on the story ot was magnificent as a christian couldnt stop my self from reading

of intrigue, romance, philosophy, and pseudoscience.

with a touch of preaching thrown in.

I resisted reading this because , well I'm an agnostic that leans towards atheism.

I am glad I changed my mind , a very deeply thought out SciFi story that tells of a culture that seemed to be a patchwork of various cultures and religions. Very fine work.

This is an amazing story, thank you so much! Illias is an example of a man that I strive to be like. Truly inspirational and I thank you again!

I got to say, I liked the story pretty well. I think you should have let him use his little talent a bit more and made him moor human character wise. He is a pure good doer in all the ways we probably see it. Like, always. I think you can improve the believability of the story by making him more human and let him sometimes follow his lower bases. And regret it, of course.

I haven't been this engrossed in a novel since my twenties! An editor from a major publisher can help you bring this to the world in print form. And the world really needs to hear this message right now.

As a condemnation of the more primitive beliefs of Islam. As a primer on closed-cycle societies. And as an intriguing argument for polygamy. The obsession with numbers (airspeed, sunrise/sunset, calendar) with things you do understand, and your dismissal of numbers regarding other aspects of this society is a little painful, as others have noted. That, and the constant flitting about in ramjets and translating of names and locations adds about 15 pages to the story. Overall, worth reading.

I still cry everytime I read this.

I need this print.

I'm actually going to print this out and bind it for myself.

Sorry xoxoxoxo

Literotica needs a larger star scale. This story deserves all the stars.

I'm only on chapter 4 right now but this is amazing. This totally needs to become a book. It would sell like hot cakes. I don't even like erotica but the world building and plot are so wonderful. I say this as an aspiring author. PLEASE publish this.

I Found this like six years ago, just used it for my Summer Reading... well... most of it, I Even got my English Prof. To read it,

I rated this story 5 stars some time ago, and if there were more than 5 stars available I would have given it more.

But there are a couple of elements that I think make the story a bit flawed, especially if you were to turn it into a published book. (Or have you already?)

First, this seems to be an excellent mainstream science fiction novel with some gratuitous sex appended. Yes, the sex scenes are as well written as the rest, but they do little or nothing to advance the story line. They're just sort of tossed in occasionally to justify calling this an erotic story.

Sure, that's true of a lot of the stories on this site, but you obviously wanted to write more than a stroke story (full-length stroke novel?) and you succeeded. But the downside is that the sex becomes unimportant because of the strength of the core story itself. I can't remember now what I did the first time I read it but re-reading your novel, I found myself scrolling through the sex scenes to get back to the story line.

Maybe there's no cure for this without extensive reworking, but the sex would be more relevant if those scenes had something to do with the way the story developed. Something should happen as a result of the sex to avoid having those scenes seem like "now for a word from our sponsor" interruptions. (Yes, I'm exaggerating for effect LOL!)

Second, you're obviously interested in earth sciences, but you spend too much time and effort on chronicling sunrise/sunset times and the like. Again, if these things have something to do with the story, I'm not sure what it is. (I thought at first it might have something to do with prayer times, but that wasn't the case.)

The novel format you chose of course gives you the luxury of weaving more elements into the story, but neither of these two elements seems to have added much that contributed to the overall arc of the story.

Nonetheless, great job!

This tale was an epic. Page after page of brilliance that almost has no equal. I enjoyed this story from the first word to the last. Quite simply this is amazing and spectacular and I doubt that mere words can tell how good this was.

Another wonderful fabulous heart touching story. Just love this.

The story is intriguing, and the five stars I gave it is well deserved. It could easily be a published work.

It's not without flaws, though.

-- There are a fair number of grammar and punctuation errors and typos. Some jar a careful reader out of the narrative, but others are just annoying.

-- You have a fixation on local time and sun movements. Why? What does it contribute to the plot? And as another commentator wrote, do you expect your readers to keep track of old names and your new names so that we can make sense of where you're talking about when you talk about hours of sunlight? And why does that make any difference to the story line?

-- The sex is sort of just added on. Do any of the sex scenes advance the plot? Doesn't seem like it to me, and I think the first thing a commercial editor would do would be to cut all or most of them and try to use the remaining ones to advance the story.

That said, it's still an intriguing piece. I found myself scrolling past the sex scenes to get back to the narrative LOL!

it was worth the time to read it.

The new society was well constructed and clearly defined. It had the tone of a morality play without preaching.

The only annoying part was caused by renaming known geographic locations.

Wonderful world building. I was riveted. Please keep up the good work and consider writing main stream. This story could be easily expanded into a full novel. Thank you for sharing your efforts!

Having a (non English) Masters degree in contemporary European literature, I am always skeptical of "erotic" stories. This fictional world and its story really got me compelled from the beginning and I kept wondering where and if I could buy a physical copy of it. The depth for it was so amazing and refreshing. Best story I read on this website. Hope you publish a (less explicit) version of it for the broad audience to enjoy. Congrats.

..but if you produce a new edition, please give the credit for the incandescent light-bulb and electric light to Sir Joseph Swan, not Thomas Edison. Your point about invention preceding theory remains valid.

Excellent dystopian sci-fi!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I could not put my phone down. This story is well written, exquisitely detailed and I fell in love with the characters! Thank you for sharing it with us!

...Chapter 10. The Forest Primeval brought to mind several issues that that may be if interest to some readers.

There are journals from early missionaries and explorers , that they saw packs of grizzly bears hunting bison and attacking Indigenous villages when the natives had been stricken with epidemics of European diseases.

As with our ecologically destructive house-cats, most predators lack full, three-color sight. That is why so many predators hunt at dusk and dawn when they have the advantage of better processing of black/grey.white images.

Think of the difference between the same scene being photographed in color and in black & white.The color photo has more complexity and description. The b&w photo has more nuance, clarity and perspective, an advantage for a sight hunter. The color image blurs, due to overlapping of the color pixels along the edges.

I never did hunt bear or other recognized predators, however...

Many decades ago, when I was a kid, I did some hunting along the Arizona-Sonora border/desert. Using old-fashioned bows and arrows scavenged from an abandoned Dude Ranch archery range. One thing I learned was; when I went hunting peccary, they came hunting me back! Pigs like the taste of human as much as we like the taste of pork.

Absolutely lovely, totally captivating work. Amazing that something so great is free. I'd love to have this in a physical book.

I loved this story!

I also completely agree that you should consider publishing this story as a book. The plot was extremely well thought out and written. While the dystopian society idea has been done before, this is a fresh and interesting take on the idea. We'll done, and I hope to read more from you in the future!

Wow, what an imagination you have! This was a very impressive story. Some of the technical details went over my head and thus were a bit annoying, but if you edit things to sound less technical or descriptive in some places, this could be quite a book! So much genuine emotion, so much creativity, I got totally absorbed in this story and read it in two days! I am officially a fan.

The world building in this is amazing. At first the protagonist's preoccupation with geographic positioning, rising and setting of the sun and time was annoying. Eventually I was pulled into it and the realization of the importance of their prayer cycles. Brilliant. The rest of the story worked the same way, immersion.

The relationships and the sex in this story are beautiful and sweet. I truly loved this. I actually feel enriched for having read it. It would be a shame and a crime to not make this availble to a wider readership.

This has been one of the best things I have read in the last few months... You really should consider publishing this as a book.

Lovely story had me enthralled totally

This is by far the best story I have read on Literotica!

I can't get over how lucky I was to find this!

Well written, great characters and SUCH A GREAT STORY! The themes of slavery, sexism and control really make you reflect on the modern world in many ways.

10/10

Seriously, it was one of the best structured story I've ever read. Such detailed concepts of science fiction and a completely believable future for earth...

ABSOLUTELY ENJOYED READING IT!!!

This was an extremely well written and engaging story. Thank you for sharing it. I would definitely recommend it to anyone who enjoys science fiction.

You sir or madam are a brilliant writer. If you just take out the erotic parts, it could be a full length novel and I can guarantee it will be successful. Just amazing. I want to read through it again and again!

I really enjoyed this story. Its focus stayed very constant throughout the story, which is uncommon in unprofessional writing. I think the whole story does very well from beginning, to middle, to end.

I started reading and just couldn't stop. Thank you. This story is captivating in its originality. Well done :)

A truly wonderful amazing story, full of so many future ideas. It's been a real joy to read.

This deserves to be published, a fantastic story and a beautiful ending.

Congratulations.