All Comments on 'The Prenuptial Agreement Ch. 02'

OK so in a way he gets another escort, just happens to be his ex. Just don't marry or get to attached where she can claim you are she are together and get some washout of you (Palamony, I think it was clalled).

Kind of a contemplative story.

Not astory for those who think a journey has to have an ending, a struture or some action I.E. closure,revenge, a stark revelation of interspection. This was a good story for the continuing journey.

A full-on 5 & dime Woolworth's philosopher.... "a tale told by an idiot, full of sound and fury, signifying nothing"... yeah, I plagarized Shakespeare... though the line is quite apropos for this rambling tumbleweed of a mess.

MEH...,Part 2 was a long, drawn out, bunch of nothing !

Definitely, NOT a typical LW story. That is NOT a bad thing. The story is original and interesting, though it did drag a bit, but not enough to get me to stop reading. Usually I do not like stories that have no real drama. But, in this story, the lack of drama, other than the revelation regarding Susan, works. Overall I give it 3.5⭐s. Part 1 gets 4⭐s, part 2, 3⭐s. Mike and Jenny getting back together, sort of, feels organic, not forced. Definitely not a RAAC.

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Thank-you

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Pasqual

Original thoughts...

Born and lived in Montreal all my life I really appreciate your reference to Schwartz’s restaurant. I am there at least once a week. by the way Schwartz’s world famous smoked meat briskets are available at Costco up here in Canada do you want me to send you a couple?

How existential.😳

EH? too many thoughts for me. disappointed in your ending. Thought maybe a day at Jack's family's house, his Lawyer or taking Connie to dinner as she was a "real" person.

Wish you hadn’t left Lit. I like your stories.

liked the 1st part better. too much talk and thoughts although I can sort of understand how mixed up he is and no life long goals to strive for. Perhaps he and Jenny can actually become a couple for life

So if Jenny turned up with a long lost brother hugging an he received pics he would of thought oh I better go home an speak to my wife no he would of done exactly what Jenny did regardless if she’s a gold digger or not she’s convinced ure cheating end of I can’t believe Jenny would take him back after the way he treated her HE admits he was a cold unfeeling bastard an never showed Jenny any love or affection

I think this story was a waste of time. That said the writer is good at telling a story I just hope it’s a better story in the future.

The first part was ,meh, ok sort of, this second part was just a bunch of psychobabble Bull Shit. You are a good writer though, just in this case you were a bit verbose with the BS.

A waste of talent

Need a shrink.

depressing as hell

Excellent story. Describes my father and I to the letter,,, without the money.

Quite moving and philosophical

I think this story was more for the author than the reader.

Thanks.

As I read this story through, I realized that, relatively speaking, I'm not as screwed up as I thought I was.

Do you feel purged? I think this was an excellent exploration of angst culminating in a realization the hiding who you are will never have good results. "Finding yourself" is a wearied term with absolutely no meaning. The MC didn't find himself, he simply shed what he wasn't. It was the parts of himself he'd grown to hate. He couldn't truly love anyone, until he was comfortable with, not love, himself. Once all the abhorrent part of himself were shed, he came to the realization that being who he was allowed him to accept others for what they were. Then, and only then, he could allow others in.

A very good 4 star story. It would have been an excellent 5++ star story if you hadn't cheated us readers out of an epilogue of children and grandchildren and happily ever afters for him and Jennifer and Susan.

This is really well written. But (seemingly intentionally) has no resolution. No point. I'm glad I read it, but honestly it's not remotely my favorite story.

I loved the contemplative, self analysis that made it personal much more than the relationships. I look forward to more of your work. Thanks

Even though I liked this tale, there was much I just glanced over. But his journey , while long winded, was in the end a tale of self exploration. And haphazard at that.

Blah, blah, blah

thought provoking

Short, dense, and it grows and weaves into lives lived and loved

Every time I read this story I see or feel more, deeper layers. It an illustration of the adage "You cant love someone, until you truly love yourself". The inferential meaning of this story is that "You can't make someone else happy, until you, yourself can be happy. Your MC truly had to strip away everything that made him unhappy. You are an artist. Love your work and admire your talent.

Thanks for the story. Although you'll probably never see this comment.

Starwolf.

Thank you as well. "You can't love someone, until you truly love yourself"

You might've just explained my past 50-odd years to me.

"6. I've learned that I am what I am. That is all. I am what I am. I am no more. I am no less. I am what I am. Me. Who am I? I am me."

I AM POPEYE, THE SAILOR MAN!

The author didn't have the ability to write existential crisis. He tried but this ultimately fell flat on a plate of insipid meandering. Words attempted to convey the emotions intended but while words show emotion in written works, it's not just the words used that matter. Its pace, it's setting, it's tone, it's word selection. All of that is the difference between telling and showing. There are excellent examples of showing on here. Loving Wives is too chaotic but if you must, find reconciliation stories rated 4+

ignore the drawn out ones, they are all crap. Seriously. Find short tales. Look at non erotic or romance. Dreamcloud was exceptional.

This category is full of miserable posers who hate women and kink fetishists. The latter always score badly for a while. The former are jacked off. Find the outliers. That's were talent is found

I guess it is a lot easier to have an existential crisis when you are rich. Seemed to really go full force into his wanderlust to find happiness after just existing, just living. Interesting to note that rich people cab be scarred by their parents as well. Also interesting to see Jenny thinking that someone she loved (her ex husband) wohkd change and could give her happiness. A false illusion as it is clear the MC was broken and she should have seen his psychological trauma prior to getting married but like so many women thought he could change. Not sure really should fault her for her reaction when she thought he had been cheating for a year. Yeah ideally she should have confronted him before filing but her hurt was palpable and she wad convinced of the worst about him and that she really fucked up and didn't love him rationalizing why she wanted out: money, old flame == happiness. She chose wrong. But honestly the MC was a broken man (probably still is to some degree) when she married him and during their brief marriage. She didn't cheat but she wanted out and was outraged that he husband didn't change and didn't make her happy and didn't love her, as he was incapable of love due to his shitty father and the horrible family drama. The apparent affair was icing on the cake. That being said, why on the *bleep* did he end up back with her? Yeah she is unhappy. Her mom died. She got divorced. She took a long time to get over what happened with Susan. Her old flame was a loser and a mirage. She fabafsuzed about picking back up with him but it was an illusion as thr best parts of the guy were really just inferior to what she thought she had with the MC, but had been inflated in her mind without consideration of the old frame's negative qualities. So yeah she had nothing. But other than poetic license, why go through this long multi-year therapeutic travel around the world and then come back to Jenny? That is what he wants? Being rich, his possibilities were pretty endless. Heck go undercover and work five years at a regular job and fall in love with someone that doesn't know about the money. Try something new. Fucking escorts and gold diggers had clearly lost allure for him. But Jenny? Why would he think that she would be his source of happiness? Even worse why would he think she would be happy with him? Because he changed so radically? They obviously had a shitty marriage that was really never a marriage. That means they did NOT have the spark. She might have thought it foist there was but it died out rapidly with her disappointment and unhappiness. Meanwhile he probably wasn't capable of feeling the spark while dating ans married. But now he reconnects with her and finds there is one? Really? There are a lot of people in the world. And he decides he wants Jenny the second time around for unknown reasons. Well written but ending was unsatisfying. Not that a reconciliation is objectionable (neither cheated, he had mental problems, she was unhappy, etc), but given their marital foundation sucked with no real spark, why settle for the least resistance route? All that meandering and soul searching and back to being comfortable with Jenny? Seemed trite.

It sure is easier being miserable and rich than poor.

Hoping for more.

3*

Psych dribble.

Should have left it at part one.

The writing is awful. One has to struggle to understand who is talking.

The story is boring.

sabes, me gusto

no es excelente, para mi al menos, pero son al menos 4 estrellas solidas.

gracias por tu tiempo autor y ojala leerte nuevamente

This is some deep philosophical shit

Very well done

Just re-visiting an old favorite story!

5

Really don't see the point of chapter 2. Average at best. A lot of rambling and "finding himself".

Your username suits you fully since anything that goes into or comes out of your body passes yhrough your cloaca. I'm guessing a lot of shit passes both ways and buckets of cum flows in yet none out. Weird thing that is but it explains the cumrot brain you have going for you.

"Cloace" away!

Interesting premise. The thing that’s wrong with this is the same thing that’s wrong with my stuff…. It’s too long. I have trouble condensing my narrative and still covering all the crap I feel I need to cover. I think he and Jenny are two pease in a pod. Too lost in the search for themselves to be able to enjoy the here and now

Jeez!! For the majority of this chapter I kept thinking I should get degree in psychology/psychiatry!! It was like he was on my couch and I was sitting back behind my desk saying awhhumm, awhhumm periodically!! Other than that I can only say “Mostly Boring”!! After reading the first chapter this one was a disappointment with only minimal interesting high spots!!!

The prose was overly florid and frankly, it came off a bit pretentious, but I still really liked it.

I loved reading of his journey to find himself, and of his effort to determine what his existence meant to him. Many go through it, often in less conscious ways, and very few have the resources the MC had to do his self exploring. The lack of resources and education of the mass of humanity tend to limit self exploration, sometimes canceling it out altogether. Of course, everyone is unique, and the MC here helped the reader explore that reality. All in all, a 5 star effort.

A lot of reflection by someone that had the resources to do it. As time passes the answers will get more vague. Thanks for the entertainment. Great story.

As if most of us aren't having enough existential issues. Bastard.

Very well written and thought out.

If a guy with that much money can't find himself then he's will probably lose his butt. Started out really great then lost it's appeal as he lost his direction. Oh well it's just a story.

I really hate the new format of literortica. If you feel the same way let them know that they wasted their money.

Liked the first part better. Thanks for your writing.

Woah, man, this is exceptional. Some deeply philosophical musings, as well as an exploration of certain psychologies. How interesting that he and Jenny were always kind of circling each other in mental orbit. I think it was because they never got closure and/or were too immature to understand each other's (damaged or confused) mentalities during their marriage--and they regretted it. The ending seemed so fascinatingly ambiguous to me. It's like they reconciled and didn't reconcile both at once.

5 stars, man