All Comments on 'The Pretend Boyfriend'

"JPB has a talent that is unmatched on this site -- a talent for writing an excellent story all the way to the last page and then using the final few paragraphs to rip the guts out of it."

I could not agree more. JPB had me hooked in with one of his best stories, ever!!!! And totally killed it with the last paragraph (sigh. Broken hearted)⁸

Ending is too abrupt.

Most women don't want to have anything to do with an 11 inch penis. First, they are really rare, like 1 in 500k. Second, they are freakishly long, and will not fit fully in a normal.woman's vagina. Third, they hurt more often than not for almost all women. Lastly, they don't necessarily have girth. It is about volume people. Not just length. Almost any woman would a thick, fat six incher to a thin, long penis. Most of the actual contact and friction in the vaginal canal is in the first few inches. And no contrary to popular opinion, women do not stretch the length of their vaginal canal.no.matter how often they take a long penis, but they can stretch yo accommodate girth. Basic biology. This modulo the fact that when unaroused the vaginal canal.will.be shorter than aroused. Talking here about the aroused state.

One of your best. The ending was a little “soft”, but at least there WAS one, sort of. I filed this one in my Favorites list.

Insupportable

I have no doubt that, after the fifteen years later that the story ended on, Bob is still the "boyfriend" (and yes, glad about it), and Constance is still manipulating the shit out of him on a daily basis.

JPB has a talent that is unmatched on this site -- a talent for writing an excellent story all the way to the last page and then using the final few paragraphs to rip the guts out of it.

I am a sucker for these kind of stories, LOVED it!

Loved it!!

Bob must have a teeny weenie because he is obsessed with cocks that are about 1 in 100k that virtually no woman wants anything to do with.

Slammed on the brakes at the end, but otherwise a good story. There really was a lot left unresolved. Could have been a 5, but under the circumstances it’s a 4.

Great story.

Good story, despite the extremely weak ending.

damn it! Wow ! in Bob's world!

there is a woman who manages to keep her brains even in the face of a big 11 inch cock.

A thousand apologies. In Bob's world, women don't have brains.

So how did she pass this test?

Call Mulder and Scully, we have an X-file here.

I give it 4 stars because the ending sucks, as usual.

Good except for the ending. 4*.

Oh, you really should have included a final scene where he fucked the shit out of her or at least had them in post coitus bliss. The story needed it.

I don't always like your stories because some have racist overtones that piss me off or are generally extremely juvenile. This one however was very sweet and lovely.

Definitely one of your best.

Please please fill out the story and complete it - with an ending. Satisfy all your readers - throughly and completely.

We were into the relationship right up to the set down almost loving confession. Then - again the one sentence line of, I did, and now……..

Talk about dropping us into a hole without the filled out and complete rest of a throughly entertaining and great loving story with some anxiety, stress, desire, sexual hots, emotion and a future of forever and ever together hat suddenly went hook, line and sinker to the bottom of the never never land hole.

Why O why are we so deprived again and again??????

SW

Good fun story. However, if we search it for holes, there is that one problem: he did not really act like he was respecting the fact she was married. He played a man who would date a married woman, thereby trashing his own reputation, and he let her get to him to the point he did cross the line. In some ways, she sabotaged what she was looking to find. Still, it was a fun story.

Yeah Yeah

Same Old . Same old.

Give Men some Pussy ..and he will be a Pig in the Puddle.

Yeah that ending was pretty damned abrupt. Sort of like slamming into a brick wall. On the freeway. Not good, not good at all, Bob. I expect better next time, you hear?

Very clever, quite different to the usual. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

4 page for a one sentence plot. What a waste of time.

Good Bob wrote this one, and it is unusually good.

every nite, every day at work or at play ever needing what they say. TK U MLJ LV NV

4 pages of detailed buildup. A short paragraph to finish it off.

Do you dislike your readers and do it on purpose?

Love it, easy to see it coming. Fun read...

A very good story. I thought the ending was rushed and did not do justice to the rest of the story. 4*

Until, like just about everyone else has said, that ending. The author weaves a fairly compelling story for nearly four pages, draws readers into the mix, then slams the damned door shut in their face with one short, weak-assed paragraph. I personally find it a bit insulting.

Jesus christ, JPB just threw concept of falling action right out the window with this one.

It was kind of like slamming on the brakes about 2 seconds before you pile into the brick wall. “Abrupt” doesn’t really adequately describe it. I liked the rest of the story a lot even though there was really nothing new in it. Still, it was put together in a very interesting way and was very pleasurable reading. Until That Ending.

Inconsistent and a too-abrupt ending

But I don't understand why you seem to regard deleting messages without listening to them to be part of your story formula, as in:

"When I got home I found two messages on my answering machine. Both were from Constance and I deleted them without listening to them. Curious as to why she called the home phone instead of my cell I took it out and saw that I hadn't turned it back on. I powered it up and saw I had messages from Constance and I deleted them."

Why would anyone do that? And as a reader, I would generally be more interesting in hearing what the character said than in not hearing. Just saying.

The title says it all.

YOUR ENDINGS SUCK BIG TIME!

It started as a five star story, but turned into an unbelievable, Pollyannic, rainbows and unicorns story. Life is dark and you’ve done much better. It is OK for the hero to come out on top. But I draw the line at scoring the winning touchdown for Notre Dame. Please continue to write. Panther fan.

Overall enjoyed

Problem with timing he told her problem she had money time to verify quickly

Time to figure out her own feelings and then?

Too much time

But still good

Yet another story where the author is too lazy to finish it, instead brushing of the reader with a single line.

A bit of a shame, I did like it until that abrupt stop.

woman, not women

Yay!

Well written, as usual. Interesting twist. 5-stars

And it had an ending of sorts. Maybe a little rushed at the end but I would have liked to hear more about their non-fake relationship simply because I was enjoying their relationship. Of course the cranky, BTB side of me wanted him to blow her up and find a new job. But that would have been just plain mean.

For me, this is one of Bob's more palatable efforts. I like this one.

Is the fact that Bob told Constance that while he was playing the boyfriend role he would still be having a sex life on the side. She didn’t say anything about her sex life, so Bob doesn’t know if she has/had a lover on the side. Either way, she’s now at the point where she wants to start something with Bob knowing that. Personally, I’d like to delete that last line and have JPB or another writer take a stab at it. There’s some interesting things to work on here.

1. Their coworkers already think they are an item so that won’t be an issue really unless there’s others like that mr eleven in prick out there who knew what her deal really is. So that’s a possibility.

2. Bob still has the friends with benefits. Now I see him dropping them for her, but what if one of them wants more from Bob? Or if one of them is somehow used to discredit this relationship? ( out of spite, or for some form of revenge, or leverage I. Some kind of hostile takeover)

3. Now if Bob had the same effect on Constance that she had on him, what did she do to relieve her urges? Did she have something on the side that could be a problem down the road? In all honesty, I don’t think she would based on her explained reasons. But does she have any jealousy issues knowing that Bob, at least, was getting some on the side? Even though it was set up in the beginning, doesn’t mean she won’t be jealous, especially now that she has feelings for him.

4. The relationship dynamics are probably going to be an issue. Like Bob said in the story. She will probably have to work for him for a time before she eventually takes over the company and then he works for her. In my experience, that does effect the personal relationship. What would they do in their home life? The one in charge at work is the one in charge at home too? Or the opposite? Something else?

5. Just how does Bob he past the mind fuck she laid on him? So she explains her reasons for doing it, so what?! It doesn’t change the damage done. So what does Bob need to do or have Constance do to help him get by that?

6. As they move up in the company, they are going to have to take business trips without the other. JPB is a master of writing this kind of cheating. There’s no way that temptation is not going to be thrown on them. Not to mention that there’s still a whole cast of characters who knew her when she went to school who could be brought in to inflict drama of one sir or another. They know she won’t fall for some things, so why not try to set up Bob? Again, this is right up JPB’s alley.

I’m sure that others can find things to add. I hope that JPB will take another look at this and add another chapter, but the f not, I hope he will let anyone else take a shot at it.

Which seemed to move really quickly. Once he figures out who she is and what she's doing I think most smart men start to hand out their resume's. He was right. If he pisses her off, he's out of a job. If he gets married to her she can use sex AND his job as a club. And who in their right mind wants to be married to someone they have to see all day and all night long? So find a new job and move along. This woman is too good at yanking his chain, lying to him and manipulating him. All that she puts him thru at the start of their relationship should have told him all he needed to know about her being unsuitable as a wife. Horrible ending.

NFW would I of been her, "Go to Boy", no matter how much I wanted her. She was just someone who knew how to manipulate him to get what she wanted. I do believe I would of handed in my resignation letter (effective immediately) when I met with my boss. Then I would of closed out my bank accounts, changed cell phone number, packed all my things up and moved as far away as possible. Life is hard enough without some controlling, emotionally screwed up woman trying to run (ruin) my life.

The ending was quick, but it fit the story well. I've been reading (and mostly enjoying) your stories for quite awhile now, so I appreciate ANY ending. Thanks again, I look forward to your next story.

Pretty interesting story. I don’t agree that it needed another four pages but one more page might have been nice, just to give a little info on how their “real” relationship progressed. I mean, Jeez, the ending provided was about as abrupt as driving into a tree at 50 miles an hour. NOT comfortable.

and well-told. However the childishness of not answering phone calls or messages rates a penalty of at least one star.

He's clearly a rising star at that company, and with Constance's apprenticeship still at the secretary level he'll have a reputation in his field that will enable him to safely jump ship by the time she's actually his boss. He would be wise to make sure he has his golden parachute in writing before she rises very far on the org chart, though.

I think the ending was good as is. I don't need another four pages of him waxing on about how great their life was from that point out. Unless you wanted him to build in another climactic event and resolution. The reality, I think.... you just didn't want the story to end because you liked it. That definitely deserves more than three stars.

Three star story that could have been five.

The end should have the the middle of the story, needs another four pages.

You crafted this story with plenty of details, going so far as to list a complete sexual history of the main character and then you end it with been happy for 15 years. It just doesn't flow. By looking at you profile you have certainly imassed a substantial library of work but but this story has made me skeptical about looking into your other works. 3 stars the parts that were good where great but the ending was lazy.

Pillage first, then burn.

Enjoyed it, I didn't expect a happy ending a nice surprise.

Clever, but a guy who claims to not want to do to some other guy what was done to him, and then agrees to engage in behavior that would never pass the husband test, it a bit contradictory.

Jeez Louise, 81 comments in only 6 days! And most of them quite positive.

I agree with others, didn't like the abrupt ending, and a complete lack of actual sex!

So only 4 stars from me. But you're still one of my faves.

Flashing news! JPB learnt to write a full story! I truly enjoyed it. I hope this one sets the bar of your next ones.

This is your very best submission! Really enjoyed it!

The end seemed a bit forced/incomplete.

Readers are commenting about how this abrupt ending doesn't match up to Bob's usual high standard? Have you read his stuff?

It just came flying to a fast end.

This story did NOT live up to your usual standards. Everything seemed to be lining up for one of your brilliant endings, when suddenly the story was over, and I was left wondering WHY?

There is only one thing that keeps this from being the perfect Loving Wives story. While Bob does mention Pauline French, he fails to mention the Landing Strip.

Jedd Clampett

She was OK dating a prospective husband who was fucking at least 3 different women? A guy who was so besotted and lacking self-respect that he would become her guard dog, and take whatever bones she threw him on occasion? It was a cute romance, but not very convincing. She lied to him at first because she didn't trust him, then manipulated him to go through her qualification testing. And when she tried to communicate with him he just deleted all her efforts without even bother to hear what she had to say?

If they are still a couple 15 years later, then this story ends the way it started, totally contrived and unrealistic.

But thanks for trying. It was a fun read anyway.

What a wonderful story, actually much too good for the "Loving Wives" genre. This is a romance, but who cares. If JPB had put it there I would never have known.

Thanks Bob. You're really good.

Jedd Clampett

This is more like the classic Bob that I love- a mix of originality, cliches, red herrings and plot twists with moments of emotional prose. I enjoyed reading it the first time and felt a bit let down at the direction the denouement went. The next day, it all came to mind and I re-read it to re-experience certain moments and turns of phrase- a hallmark of good storytelling and of Bob's better stories.

Keep it up!

This is a bit different from most JPB stories. Boy ditches cheating first wife, boy eventually gets an upgrade. That part is the same, but the whole latter scenario is interesting and atypical. After such an odd start, how can they build an honest relationship? I guess (because JPB tells us) they do, but it seems like an ominous start. I could nitpick about some details (like why would a woman actually want her coworkers to see her in the back seat with her legs in the air? Pretty extreme way to tell others, "Hey, I'm taken. Now move along!"), but the tale is a fun read as usual.

Great story - enjoyable read - what more can be said ?

KEEP ON WRITING !

Situation, Conflict, Resolution.

He wants a chick, there is a conflicted mystery, the mystery is resolved.

What more do you want?

Excuse me...I forgot. Bob also wrote that big FUCK YOU of a story where he did NOT resolve the conflict like a bitch.

Carry on with the slings and arrows.

While I know that you like to leave your stories at a certain point and leave it to the reader to fill in the blanks, this ending left me feeling like the coyote in a roadrunner cartoon that ran off a cliff! I'm left dangling over a cavern wondering what the hell just happened. For shame, Bob. Lol!

For the read. Your stories of late seems a little flat compared to some of the older one had that JPB edge. They are still entertaining. Thanks for sharing.

....The ending, while predictable, was a bit abrupt. It felt like you just ended it to meet a deadline or something. It would have been nice, for example, to know how many kids he and the CEO have after fifteen years....

Still a delightful read, thanks very much for sending us this gift!

Let's give it up for "Dawson! Dawson! Dawson!" -- who is smart enough to carry the ball as far as he can, then hand it off to the Wharton MBA! ;-)

Should have been a 2 page story. At 4 pages it dragged on too long.

Great story.Didn't know how this was going to end. Keep them coming.

Classic JPB. Always entertaining and a pleasure to read. Got to say I agree with previous comment. You have 2 stories in 1 involving the main character that draws the reader into what could turn into a romance novel. Could have lots of twist and turns as Constance becomes the boss. Always a pleasure reading this authors work. ⛥⛥⛥⛥⛥

carry your latest stories out but I would love to have a chapter 2 I am a sucker for a good love story

Great tale. He figured things out and she had to come clean. And they lived happily ever after. At least in fiction.

Five Stars

Pauline French really getsaround lol.

Enjoyed the story and the way it was written. The lead character in a JPB story is often a reliable role model and one that most men can relate to. No complicated ethics, straight talking and authentically flawed. Sometimes the females don't have that chalk and cheese realism and Constance was too logical to be feminine. Nevertheless another good story. Thanks JPB.

A lit of story for a truncated ending. Not JBP's best.

You can't please everyone. If you cut it short, people will complain; if you write "too" much after the climax, people will complain about padding.

People complained about the ending of "The Sopranos." I always thought, we dropped into their lives, except for flashbacks we never knew what came before, then we dropped out of their lives. Should it have continued until Tony was on his death-bed?

My personal beef is TOO much back story. Not here, where I felt it was germaine to the story, but too many stories feel the need to describe every date they had in high school, even when it has nothing to do with the story!

Not the typical LW story. I really enjoyed reading this story. I gave it a 5 plus. Excellent!

I've liked many of your stories, but this one is your best. Extremely well written and I really couldn't see where it was headed until the end. Anybody can write a stroke story. Stimulating the imagination is a much greater challenge and you've done it well.

Thank you for your well-reasoned analysis of "morality clauses" and supporting my "real world" objections to the trope.

You are correct, of course, that this is LW, and any relation to reality is purely coincidental! I guess it's case of we all have our standards for suspension of disbelief, and this is one that stretches mine near and sometimes over the limit!

This was one of your better stories. Enough plot twists to keep it interesting, no adults acting out like children, and a happy ending for dessert.

Really enjoy your writing.

5* s

JPB is this a new tactic/style to end a story in one sentence that covers 15yrs? It is different but in the manner you did is it took a 5* down to a 4* and almost 3*.

Way to many writers seem to rush to end their stories but usually the rush is in 2-3 paragraphs not one sentence.

I really like your writing. You have more talent than just writing these short stories. I would like to know who you really are and what you really do for a living. My guess is that you work on a TV script team, and just enjoy seeing your writing in print. Keep it up.

won't end well. He told the truth from the beginning. She never voluntarily stopped lying. He was a fool for sticking with her.

The webs JPB spins are always pleasant to read. Without any doubt one of the best and most prolific authors in Literotica. Thanks a lot for your many interesting and entertaining stories.

An ending?

That wasn't prescient, was it?

This is @Just Plain Bob on his best...And when that happens we can´t stop reading it till the end...4*

I always look forward to a good read from JPB. For my money, this was a very good read. What, no "Landing Strip"? Did they go out of business?

Great story enjoyed it immensely 5+

Ending was too short for full marks though.

Really liked your spiced up formula!

Go see a counsellor, your vision of yourself as this wonderful wronged man is delusional, stop dreaming and get a life. Or a hooker, in the words of the orange racist, so sad.

Why are you complainers reading stories here? Buy a fucking book if you want professionally written stories.

Long story with unbelievable situation, weak plot line, no real purpose or value. A total waste of time.

She should get an award for entertaining so many guys.