by annadixon
Hope you continue to develop this character, looking forward to the next chapter.
The writing was good but it didn't show any sexual excitement. It just told of a man controlling a woman, but not sexually. If they did something sexually adventurous then it would be something to talk about. But all he did was sit her in front of a mirror and look at herself and give her several orders on why she is a slave and who does she serve.
Needs more combination of hypnosis and erotica.
Not a bad start, but it was rather sudden. It would be interesting in future chapters to learn more about Anna. Looking forward to more.