All Comments on 'The Protocol of Ahab Ch. 01'

I liked this. A good intro story. Could have used another pair of eyes on several spots for three typos, but a very good start!

What strong writing! Real class! Love it

An enjoyable read and I hope you will continue with the storyline. I would really like to know how their relationship develops.

Well written and seemingly based on experience or a very lively imagination. I like your writing style and have added this story to my favourites. I've also ticked the 'Follow Author' box. Looking forward to more episodes of this story or others in the same genre. I read only lesbian stories on this website and this is one of the best recent stories. It seems to me that the standard of writing has been going downhill over the past few months. So, I was delighted to come across this gem. Thank you, and please continue to write.

Several recommendations: Stick with past tense. Jumping to present tense and back is jarring. In casual conversation people use contractions yet you infrequently have your characters do the same. (This was more of a problem in one of your prior works.) Needs proofreading to catch spelling errors and typos.