All Comments on 'The Rant'

for the metal midget commenters in LW - thanks for submitting though.

I didn't get past the first three paragraphs before I literally laughed out loud.

As a man who has his own unwelcome passenger in the back seat, I say kudos to you author.

The rest of the story (to this point still unread) might be pure dreck, but for these gleaming 5 seconds, I have to thank you.

And funny thanks for sharing.

Thoroughly enjoyed it - very original; well plotted, well written! Well done!

A good rant and creative presentation.

I liked the writing, too. However, another pass for editing would have helped-the typos and grammar/punctuation errors were distracting.

Anonymous posts about a "metal midget" when it should have been mental midget. Nothing like pulling your dick out and slamming it in the door, if it's even long enough to do so. That part of your anatomy is probably a midget too, LOL.

As far as the story, nicely done. Interesting perspective, and humorous.

Compleeter

you got anon good one very exciting. Here's one to get excited about see if you can spot it, you fuking simple cunt.

Irony is a great thing to use in stories, when it comes to a 'LW' story and this one had loads of it, thanks for the entertainment. Oh one other thing one quote you could have put in this story was,

"The pen is mightier than the sword"

Maybe in the next story?

I love how your protagonist wished he had a better author. Frankly, I've wished that too on occasion.

Curtis: Why the hell did he bring a sword to a gunfight?

Andrea: It wasn't a gun fight.

C: Still...he KNEW it was a substandard weapon. He admitted it!

A: Yes, but it WAS his first time. Remember our first time?

C: (whistfully) Sure...but we were stupid, He was knowingly stupid. And that's...stupid!

(Two wander off bickering as I retrieve my keyboard...)

How original! I think I'll have to read it again a few times just in case I missed something. Interesting concept, and I suppose all us authors must put some of ourselves into our stories, though maybe I shouldn't be admitting that. Great read Thanks. i'll go back and read it again now.

That was probably the most amusing story I've read on Literotica in a long time. Kudos for having come up with something really original.

Really different. Loved the twist at the end. Ink for blood, who knew.

This was a fun read. A couple of transitions were bumpy, making it a 4.

5 for originality.

Well done. Needs proofreading

Nice story...thanks for sharing.

and you know what, it deserves 10 fucking stars.....out fucking standing.

i liked the hook in the begining and talking to the other authors was cute, and it was entertaining as a lark.

You're a sick man. Good to see I'm not the only loon out there. Excellent. 32 stars

HA

Great story-way way out there in left field!

1THM you are wacked! Seriously dude get some professional help!

But until then ....more of these wild tales -please

By far the best one I've read this week. Don't care about the grammar, punctuation, syntax or any of that crap. Just a real fun read.

Thanks, buddy...Nicely done!

this one will be weirding me out for a while. Frankie Miller pulp comic was probobly the more apt comparison but not as alliterative. Full marks !

......a different take on a cheating wife.

Well written and easy to read but i don\t llike to get taken. I know somelike this type story but i was never a fan of science fiction written under the delusion of reality.

Clean it up. A story this good doesn't deserve a "Kurt" and a "Curt". If the errors and weaknesses are there to support the ending, I think they need a little more emphasis, but just a little.

Damn.

A good fantasy story. Your try with the satire was not succesful, but this fantasy story was good effort from you. I apreciate not only near to life stories, but fable, fantasy, satire stories as well, so I apreciate your fantasy story well. Thank you.

1TM is remarkably objective. The spelling and missing words (and other mechanics) are for shit, as admitted! Regarding the meat of the story, Hubby screws up his options royally. In the US a few months ago, a decently attired girl got a chance to wish her boyfriend changed into a better one! He is momentarily appalled, but then grabs the magic and wishes for HIS ideal girlfriend, whereupon a delightful slut appeared! Hubby, in this story, needed to ask 1TM to write-in HIS perfect wife! Much as many like 'Kill the Bitch' revenge, I suspect they would prefer Perfect Woman (instead) in their OWN lives!

The style is reminiscent of John Irving (Garp, Hotel New Hampshire) where the readership is brought into the story! Neat, but NOT very erotic!

4*

Should have read... In a US TV advertisement ... SORRY. (take a point off!)

if you don't have anything to write about, just read. don't put this stuff out, please.

now we have The Paper Ink Transferrer. Why not, TK U MLJ LV NV

but entertaining and nice spin.

...wish it had been thought through one more level(why was she pursuing a divorce still after the hero melted?)

Title says it all.

What a different concept ! Was an entetaining read!

A lot of fascinating twists and elaborations of the basic idea . One important question, why did you change your login....... You seem to have also changed the style of your commentaries....

Now this is one story where the anonymous ranters are not going to be able to say, "oh, it's just the same old bullshit..."

Very imaginative and funny!

thanks,

ohio

Read every word and then you will understand. (Maybe)

This was good entertainment value, for the money. :)

Yes, I am finding that I have dropped too many words in this one. The problem is that I proofread at least five times and still my mind puts the words in that my hands did not type. I will try to improve on this I find it irritating. I was going for originality with this story. I have never read anything like this so I wrote it. As for why Tammy would be, looking to divorce after the paper tiger vanished? Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned. Ben has telegraphed that he is not taking her back. To Ben she cheated, her actions were cheating. So not getting Ben back only means one thing divorce and getting paid for cheating. In Canada, women have no problem being paid for cheating, happens all the time. The comments in the story about Canadian law are unfortunately accurate.

five just for innovation! While technically some aspects could have been better ... the innovation was so good it deserves high marks!

Thanks for sharing.

How would you like to wake up and find out that your the first wife in a SS06 story? The chance of you making to an other story right up there with red shirt Security Guy 3 on Star Trek. DSQ well you will live for a long, long, long time, 80 pages and counting. But with HDK you would just cease to exist, HINT how about going for 150 or 200 HDK?

Loved the story, but I fear for you because that is how I sometimes think, and well so for it has not paid off well ;-p Really, good story liked the stile.

I have to agree with others about this being an original plot. I didn't understand why he didn't wait until the divorce was finalized to shred his opponent, but I guess he did not realize that ink would pour out instead of blood.

But I do think SS should have served the papers, driving a mustang, HDK should have been giving legal advice, and MM should have done the psychological analysis, with DQS coaching Tammy on how to be an absolute bitch.

Thank You.

It's certainly entertaining. DEH

"Alice in Wonderland" or perhaps we have all fallen down the rabbit hole or gone through the looking glass. It was very unusual and quite unique.It's always a pleasure to see something new come along. Good job!

and fun. Other then the technical glitches this one was incredibly clever and fun, never has a cheating wife/revenge story gone so far off the reservation, and I love every minute of it! When he takes out Curt (or is it Kurt?) is a scene reminiscent of Judge Doom getting it in "Who Framed Roger Rabbit?",just absolutely delightful. The moral of the story, other then the play on the pen being mightier then the sword, might be those who play with fire get burned, those who play with imaginary character get inked....

I would have given it a five if an editor had caught the errors !

An author should no more be proofing or copy editing his own story than should Dale Earnhardt Jr. be pumping the gas or changing the tires; the pit crew takes care of those things. So thinkingman, get a copy editor. You just drive the car.

It's one of those stories where reality isn't considered and the author does have a poetic license .

Still it was an enjoyable read.

Thanks for the story

Just a bit of editing would make it perfect. Thanks for writing.

It reminded me of Charlie Chaplin hanging his umbrella (or walking stick?) on the 'moon'. Very much out of the box thinking.

#'

"The pen is mightier than the sword"

Maybe in the next story? '

Didn't get the story, did you?

Great, creative, well written story. Need more/better editing? I don't know, but it's not glaring. To me, the story is #1 and unless the structure, language, spelling, over/under punctuation is THAT awful to be denied, it won't get more than a one star lowering from me. I loved the imagination here and the black 'blood' (which I never expected) put it up to the 5 star level! (Oh my; I used an exclamation poynt there and then a semi-colon / and THAT spelling too? - EDITOR, EDITOR!)

Different and as someone said "out of the box"

Awesome!

Well done , Weird wacky . Not my cup of tea is this your cup of tea bourbondog?. Why am I asking ,your just an asshole reader you drink beer.. I should ask 1t . Ya he's the ass that that left It here,never picks up his shit probably spit in it. Hey I'm more than an asshole reader I get to rate this shit , so 5 stars an negative I for that 1 t asshole for not putting his dirty cup in the sink. Ya your right bourb if he does this shit again we will throw his ass and his dirty cup in the trash!

And a unique story. An editor would have helped, IMHO.

just use white out or an eraser, TK U MLJ LV NV

Liked it!

Give you a clue - my favourite painter is Magritte, and this was truly surreal! Very original and totally captivating.

I think the only trick you missed was not writing PENIS mightier than the sword!

this story go's from one to the other. like reading back wards . more strange .

still as you say your trying to learn how to write a story.

Sometimes fact IS stranger than fiction. Excellent story..4*

what the fuck you talkin' 'bout? Get a life!

humor and satire??????????????

LOL that was fun pure and simple - paper tiger and all -

Really nice work - do more heh

If HDK had written this.....

If HDK had written this, the protagonist would have been broke and homeless, and masturbating while looking at Kurt fucking his wife in his bed, all the while professing his undying love for the wife that pissed all over him and destroyed his life.

Much better off with the author he had.

Thats funny, You sound like your cuckold from other writers Hahahaha

...are you certain? Seems to me you´re talking about Cuckerotica´s cuck-lover-in-chief - but that without any doubt is JPB...

Very cleverly written. Thanks.

Very clever plot & well thought out, pity about the spelling & poor English. I enjoyed the read but it would have been better with the help of a good editor. 4 ****

In a world full of copycats, this was a breath of fresh air, and for that alone you get 5***** stars..... About halfway through the story got bogged down just a bit as you were setting up the surprise twist, but the perfect ending was worth every minute wrapping this tale in a fun original endng ......

if for no other reason than it's creativity. I love thinking outside the box and this is so far out there it's great.

With this story you proved yourself to be a "thinking man." Thanks.

As we all have read most of the stories in this loving wife section , and in doing so we all have our fave writers . But I truly believe that if HDK would have written this , he would have made you a cucky little bitch . As we all know that HDK is a cucky fag wimpy bitch himself . You did well with this and thank you for writing it

PROBOBLY

PROBOBLY NOT!

One thing at least your comments were shorter then

Always inane and pretentious but shorter

I think it was creative, concise, and entertaining.

Novel twist. Creative mind. Well written and entertaining. What's not to like?

A bit of a reach, but after two readings, I find that I do like it. Thanks.

and quite funny. Largely wasted on this audience.

Good story

Enjoyed

The story shows talent, which is incredibly rare in LW stories. Nice job!

Weird but good, I enjoyed the read although I kept expecting some strange 'tangent' to occur. Overall I liked it but, as one of the other commenter's noted. It was wasted on some of the readers here! Good Job, Thank You. I gave it 4**** only because I felt there could have been a bit more.

Ok this was so over the top I loved it.

I'm a little slow, but I finally got it.

Easier to understand this time, but still pretty deep for me.

Enjoyed

Curious. Different. A little odd. Don't try this at home.

Brilliantly bizarre.

Wow!!

Hm, I think I don't get it. Is this Kurt an imaginary person he just killed?

My head hurts

stop smoking weed when ya want ta write!

Here you go again writing dumb stuff stop

It’s unfortunately different from anything I’ve ever liked before. At first glance, it’s incoherent. Looking again, wait… Why would I look again?

On to something else…

Such a different story/style. Kudos. For its uniqueness alone it gathers 5 stars and the story is fun also.

If this is the best you can do stop

LOL

Brilliant, hilarious, 5* all the way. Most of the comments reinforced my view that most of the commenters on Lit don't have a sense of humor.

Hilarious. Still laughing. 5*