All Comments on 'The Rask Rebellion'

>operators operating operationally

>well-written tank battles

My new favorite, really done. I really like how you handled Cooper and Korbaz.

This was an amazing piece. I started reading unsure of the whole Araxie-Human-Valbaran dynamic, but I'm ecstatic to say you did a really good job pulling that off! I'm really happy Korbaz finally gets some more love! Now I wonder how Nazka will take to the shift in Rask ideology...

No amount of stars can express how much I enjoyed this. Thank you Snekguy.

You are a helluva world builder.

glad to see you back

Out-fucking-standing!

What's coming up next. A good story once agaian

First of all, Damn you for stealing my sleep with your story.

And secondly, this was an amazing story man. Got to finally feature the dusky cats front and center.

WOW, I can only imagine how long this took to put together. 65 Lit pages is roughly 650 Word pages... I'll say it again. WOW!

Brilliant stuff, as ever. Your worldbuilding continues to leave me in awe, and also nice to see Korbaz in the spotlight!

A great story yet again.

The Rask.

A people who live in desert lands.

A bit like the middle East.

The Rask a people who prey on others.

The Rask a people who want others to submit.

Yet who have no honor at the end?

There are a people today you could use as an example.

Cheers

Well done and kept me going for a couple of days. I really like the story lines and the characters. Probably too much to ask for, but how about another one? Please.

I love it. Your work is amazing, and I really enjoy the whole universe you've built around your stories!

Also... Feet First Into Hell!! (am I wrong?)

Good story, whish there was a bit more variety of sex though, some m/f anal would be nice.

Please continue putting out these awesome stories!

Great story! I was wondering when Korbaz was going to get some attention, and the story definitely didn’t disappoint me. Thanks!

I always look forward to more stories from you and you never disappoint! Amazing! Loved it! I love how much detail goes into the world building. The techie becoming the agriculture branch. The rask houses being the way they are due to their resources and the higher gravity. Amazing! Can't wait for the next!

Yet another installment. Yet again its a long one. Long ones are good ones. No rush, great character development. Not sure what to say since like most other guys im already heavily hooked into this series world. Not sure if it was needed to include final breaching gate battle in such detail since nobody from important characters participated and there was great power mismatch included so it was certain who would go on top. Somewhat let down on the last pages. I kinda hoped of little bit more. Not sure still what that could be but still the end was kinda sudden for me. Maybe its the case of me beying hooked so much that i simply did not want the story to end :). I sure hope there is still more coming. 5/5... as usual

Outstanding. Epic. Amazing. Superb. Description fails to capture how well-crafted a story you have gifted to your readers. There is only one truly appropriate response to this - more!

Epic! Thanks for an excellent read & taking the time to share your world with us.

Looking forward to your next posting.

Congratulations. You should be proud. The world that you have created is unique. Pulling the threads is species and worlds together is no mean task.

Just wow. I honestly can't describe how amazing this story was. Definitely your best work so far.

Can't wait for more epic tales in the future.

Someone finally gave Korbaz the dicking she needed. Great story.

Snek, now we know where you have been, at your computer creating this masterpiece.

Wow, this may be your best story yet. But then again, I've loved all your work. Thank you for this in our hours of need. Semper Fi!

That "war" was more of a one-sided slaughter. Good story overall though.

That "war" was almost a one-sided slaughter.

Read all your stories, this was by far my favorite. Binge read it, like a novel I couldn’t put down. Love your work, keep it up!

A wonderful way to pass the quarantine time!!!

Love all your work! Thank you for this!

Nobody matches your stories or world building SG I always comeback for anything new you write that being said , my one hang up everytime I read one of your stories is the amount of femdom not saying it takes away from the story but it would be nice to read a couple where the male is not so submissive. cooper was a breath of fresh air and so was McGregor from splashdown and I'm not saying the male has to be all dominate (even though that would be good) lol it would nice if the guys had more backbone in your world👍🏽💯

Loved the story. It was very long but worth staying up all hours of the night and most of the next day reading it.

My favorite character was Cooper and his smart ass mouth and attitude. He was just what the Admiral needed. The interaction between the two was priceless and entertaining. The sex wasn't so bad either.

Thanks for a great and well written story.

65 pages, dude. That is so many fucking google doc pages. This consumed my life for days, and now I've finished, and now I am as well. Incredible. Absolutely incredible. I am incredibly envious; of your industry, and your imagination. You have created something. You've made an entire other universe. You should be proud. This is a crowning achievement.

I only wish there was more of the Timberwolf's crew. I really missed them after the halfway point and the focus shifted. Mizi is so cute, I'm in love and I wish I could read it all again for the first time.

This is superb. Beautifully written, wonderfully well-plotted, with exquisite worldbuilding. I've read all of your Pinwheel series and more besides, and it is Perfect. Sublime. You have a powerful talent for writing and worldbuilding.

I also can't believe I've found a writer who hits ALL of my kinks. Size difference, gentle femdom, aliens/interspecies, novellas, narrative and in-world consistency, well-written sex scenes... Beautiful. Simply beautiful.

I really liked the story. Well written. But I have one question. All the vehicles running fuel cells or fission reactors would be electric motor driven, so all those rumbling engines should be quiet whine, no?

Thank you for your comments guys, I read them all. I woke up today to see that this story had been voted first place in the April Reader's Choice awards, and I have you guys to thank for that. This is the first time that one of my stories has won any kind of award or competition, so I'm pretty thrilled about it. I'm really glad you guys have enjoyed this one so much!

@TLB1981

Up next is a fantasy story about a wizard and a lizard, then more Pinwheel.

@acup

This one took almost four months, including editing. It was one of those cases where it completely ran away from me, and I was worried it would end up too long and convoluted, but I'm relieved by the overwhelmingly positive reception.

@Vladdimir

@Smutol

I always have more on the way. There's some stuff coming up that I'm really excited about, but I have to lay some groundwork first. The plan right now is to introduce inter-species reproduction, to take back the lost Ker'gue'la colony, and to start heading out into deep space where new aliens and empires will be encountered! I'm very eager to introduce the Jakkari, a cybernetically-enhanced species of Therapsid who have been locked in perpetual war with several Bug colonies for hundreds of years and have turned their entire solar system into a fortress as a result.

@Anonymous

I think there would still be enough machinery to make suitably tank-like noises. That said, a quieter engine for a scout vehicle could be useful.

I have a ton of concept art for this story that's available on my website, but I'm going to see if I can get all that uploaded here too.

I really enjoyed the story; the characters are well fleshed out and your talent as an author is on clear display. At 65 pages, this story could easily be considered a novella, and I would encorage you to continue to write, maybe even consider writinng and publishing an actual book (or e-book), if you haven't already. Reading this transported me to another universe of exciting and limitless possibilities, and I was almost sad to reach its end. The sex scenes were well integrated, and their usage was well thought out and did not seem forced or unnecessary. I really appreciated the amount of thought and work that went into this story, its characters, and its universe. Keep up the good work!

One of my favorite stories on this whole platform. 10/10 thank you for all your hard work!

Once again a fantastic story. You have an admirable ability to describe the odd species and their relationships. Thank you for another nice read !

I loved this story! I loved all you're stories but I definitely needed this during the quarantine. Thank you for all the work you put into this series!

Loved it

"No," he shot back, taking another drink from his tube of Jarry juice. "That's disgusting." (Never change snekguy ;p)

I have other pinwheel stories that I like more as they tickle me more personally; but this is your greatest story my friend. Lots of payoffs for fans of your series, wonderful action/adventure, somehow even more world building/lore for future stories and wonderfully clever but human and realistic dialogue between characters. A Real and Complete story with great sex scenes, this may be the greatest sci-fi erotica story ever. Please never stoop writing Snekguy, you are a gift to this world with your storytelling.

I wonder if someone can draw the characters?

I would like to see what the driver the Hunteress and the admiral look like.

Clever yarn.

I originally stumbled across your works just trying to find some sci-fi erotica to...you know...but your work is so impressive. These characters are amazing, the plot and tone is sublime, and the descriptions and dialogue is always great.

Thank you so much for this story, I look forward to the next one, and hope that you have as much enjoyment in writing these tales as we do in reading them!

I fucking enjoyed that. 3 long nights with little sleep and finished it. I've been working on battling my compulsive behaviours and letting me put down a story when I need to get to sleep and taking it up later. This story really kicked that work in the nuts.

Was very compelling reading. I wondered briefly if the lack of death of characters I cared about made the narrative more trite and frivolous. But then remembered that a while back I decided not everything needed to be shitting grimdark and heart rending to be art.

This was entertaining and pleasing and the only sore point was my inability to conjure a consistent image of a Valbaran. Murder kitties? My brain's got that locked, short feathered lizard humanoids with hollow bones? Brain keeps changing the look. Probably have imagination cancer.

Came for the smut. Stayed for the story. Even found myself almost skipping some parts of the erotic scenes just because I needed to what would happen storywise. Excellent world building.

Epic writing, had to binge the whole series just couldn't stop - totally absorbed throughout, this one is one of the best yet. Please continue with your saga, it is fascinating to read, you truly have a wonderful imagination and can put it into powerful words - thank you

Incredible work as usual, Snekguy. I've never been tempted to recommend something I found on this site to my friends and family before. I'm rereading it for the second time in as many months because I just can't get enough of your worlds. That said, there are a few mistakes/typos I noticed that I thought I should point out.

Page 4: “I would soon blanket everything” should be “It would”.

Page 4: “but she had spent many months on the Pinwheel, where the humans kept the gravity thirty percent lower.” A small math mistake here. If the baseline is 1.3 G (Borealis), then 1.0 G (Earth Standard) would be ~23% lower, as 0.3 G is ~23% of 1.3 G. I could see the corrected sentence confusing more people than the currently incorrect one, however.

Page 7: “wringing her hands in agitations as she peered up at him expectantly.” I’m not sure if this is a mistake or not, because the sentence works as is, but I expected this to be “wringing her hands in agitation”, with agitation being singular.

Page 10: There is an inconsistency in how you spell the native term for the Valbarans. Near the top of the page it is spelled "Valbara'nay", but later it is spelled "Val'ba'ra'nay".

Page 11: "solid steed" should be "solid steel"

Page 27: " "Oh, yeah," replied. "I guess I can see that." " This line of dialogue is missing Ben's name.

Page 40: "The sheets of metal than the Rask had crudely" should be "that the Rask had crudely"

Page 62: ""What makes you think that you can prevail today when you succumbed to me in your prime?" Korbaz sneered as they squared off. She was hunched over like a beast, her arms splayed wide, her head low as she scrutinized Korbaz with her one eye." This line of dialogue is misattributed, it should say "The Matriarch sneered".

I adore the universe you've created; it's impressive, engaging, and fascinating. I eagerly await your next story.

During shit down you used your time to write a wonderful story, thank you so much 6TRBck

I have never spent three nights reading a story ! Was very compelling reading .

I REALLY liked it ,needless to say you got 5*s .If i could have given more you'd of gotten them .Now on to read more of your work ,the comment about Patreon was not wasted on me , I support one other there Tefler . so maybe another is in the making.

Thanks for the read & sleepless nights

txcracker

The use of multiple perspectives was really well done! My favorite character changed with each switch. I will definitely keep an eye out for more from this author.

Excellent plot and sub plots. Skillful development of each main character. This was fun to read and I will read everything this author has written.

Gets 5 stars in every way, and when you said "here's something substantial" you weren't kidding.

Very well crafted world, believable and consistent. Exciting storyline, fully developed characters and writing at it's best. Story nicely concluded, but subtly set up in case you fancy a sequel. I can't wait for the movie.

H

Thank you for sharing your stories here with us. Stay safe and thanks

Monstrosity in length, that is. At 65 pages, this is the longest singe chapter story I have read here. I've now finished reading/rereading the entire series in order. Amazing work.

Tod172 over in Loving Wives got me hooked on well written military themed stories. I heard that you wrote similarly high quality stories in the Sci Fi category. If I had known that you would throw in a threesome between a hot cat woman with big tits and a fine ass, a cute lizard girl with perky tits and a fine ass, and a somewhat nerdy human soldier, I would have passed. That would have been my loss. I thoroughly enjoyed the story, the characters and your talent for set scenes. Thanks for the story. You even sold me on the threesome. I appreciate your work.

I fucking love Cooper!

You, me, probably everyone.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story, it's just a shame I have an unknown amount of time to wait for the next one. While obviously you need to flesh out the Universe and focus on other stories, my main interest is in the Human and Borealan romances. The only one I wasn't too fond of was Hot Kofe, something about it I just didn't like. Oh and I felt that the second story for The Outpost wasn't necessary and if I was in his situation I would have asked for someone to come down and teach the pack how to speak English. However I understood why he didn't really need to.

I thought it was nice that Korbaz was finally able to get her own Human. I really liked the character of Cooper, the parts of the story when he was in his tank and his interactions with Korbaz and the other Rask Borealans. When she came back to her room drunk and they started talking/having sex I loved the noises she started to make. It was obvious that Cooper had the will power to make himself her Alpha but I knew it wasn't part of the story and I liked how it all ended.

The other part of the story I enjoyed was the Scout team, I thought the interactions between the three different races were all very good and funny.

Moving forward I'd like to see a collection of short stories that is focused on the Human and Borealan relationships onboard the Pinwheel. As well as other occasions when the two sides clash and a romance blooms. Oh and we also need more stories with Raz and Stanley, Raz the Farmer was great but we need more.

I just wish I didn't get so obsessed with the Human and Borealan romances, lol.

Another well thought out story by a good Author, I only hope he has more to say in this series. As in follow up on the Rask as Mercenaries. 5 Stars easily.

Your story is elegantly written, but I had to stop reading it part way through because the actions of just about all of the characters were so stupid.

1. The attack: The commander of the Furious Swipe doesn't know what their course is or where they are. He has to ask. On a Starship, really?

2. We've been locked on by radar, don't move or take evasive action. Don't sound general quarter, activate the safety systems, or anything else. Let's just sit here like a dead duck and see what happens.

3. There's a missile heading directly for us. Again, don't move. How dangerous could it be?

4. We've been attacked like Pearl Harbor. Well, better send all of the attacking country's officers and troops back, with all of the intel they've gathered. Interring them for the duration of the conflict would indicate ill-will, and we can't have that.

5. The UNN has been dealing with a planet for decades or more, but has never conducted a planet-wide survey. It's best if we don't know what's down there, it spoils the surprise...

6. There' a huge sandstorm that's going to cover the planet that will negate the advantage our technology brings, but it will dissipate in several months. We'll, it would be shear stupidity to wait until we have the advantage of the high ground again.

Its best if we attack immediately, when we are at our weakest, with a hodgepodge of troops who've never trained together in equipment they've never used, that's also ill-suited to the task.

7. By all means, don't brief your troops during transit. Wait until after they've landed. I mean, who would ever think of attacking a staging area before you've finished your briefings? It's best if the troops don't know WTF is going on until just before they start moving.

8. In all cases, underestimate your adversary, including driving into canyon ambushes (Gunga Din anyone?) It pays to never read military history like the Teutoburg Forest or Uzbin ambushes.

9. Use a recon vehicles that could pull a trailer with more fuel and drones, but don't equip it properly, its best if recon is done like an under provisioned Cub Scout trip.

10. Don't send hourly reports if you're THE advanced recon unit. One every few days is more than enough. And by all means, don't send two or three vehicles so you have backups.

I could go on for many more pages, but I finally had to stop reading. It was just too painful. My question is why? Why craft an imaginative, well written story with such blatant and fatal flaws? Why is abject stupidity always the Go-To plot devise. And why are battles between combatants with FLT and anti-gravity portrayed like WWII?

Why not make both combatants crafty and smart? It would add immensely to your story and your writing.

Also, look up FireFaery's God of Mischief and Lies and Talemaster's A God Called Bruce.

Absolutely fist class story, loved it.

Thank you it was an incredible story. I enjoyed it immensely

Thank you for this story.

I have read very deep in to night and paid the price the next day. Very good. Especially because the dose of sex was limited. In many storys is , probably because this an erotic website, way to much sex in it and kills the story.

The only thing I missed in this and other works of you is a main female human character.

I appreciate the story and the length you went to make a tale that has kept me from my sleep. Your characters are fun to follow and a good story stands on its own merits and doesn't need a lot of unnecessary sex. Your story seem to have the right amount. Who thought that interspieces sex could be erotic? I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Mike

As usual, a fantastic story, you never disappoint us with your writing, and this universe of yours is marvellous.

Looking forward to the next piece of work you share with us.

The sex scenes were great, the combat scenes were fantastic. Pretty damn good at writing out pitched battles and descriptions of everything going on.

Cooper was a 10/10 character, loved the cunt. His lines had me laughing a number of times.

And we men who also love them. Author, thank you.

Page 18: "Then, we should keep one another company," Mizi chirped."

Mizi is so freaking cute.

" If you do any weird Rask shit, you'll be fucked by the thorny cock of the artillery company, so behave yourselves'

Ooh God, bitch, I laughed so hard out loud at this line.

Snekbro.... you suck man. All I wanted to do was jack off to alien broads getting nailed by humans. And I got that, and I also got a insanely good war story with great dialog, and great characters that I grew to care about. So annoying, I just wanted to whack it.

(Five fucking stars, great story man seriously, you've got talent)

Um, shouldn't that be 'Borealis shattering orgasm'?

Come on, THAT was way too easy; gotta make it a bit harder to harass you.

The Lit story lottery is an interesting pastime, one I've been playing for a long effing time, now. You never know what you're going to get when you click on a single chapter title.

Sometimes, it's a couple of page jerk story, other times it's a misspelled, horrid grammar mess, leaving you wondering how the hell it is rate 4.xx. Then there are times like several days ago, now. They don't happen often, but they're like hitting a $200 Scratch Off, or picking an unexpectedly enthusiastic hooker in Vegas; the experience keeps you coming to test your luck.

That's what happened when I opened "The Rask Rebellion". It's been a few years, or more, since I read through everything you had posted at the time. I wasn't certain, when I saw your note about this being 'remastered', if I had read it before, or not.

As I got into the first dozen pages, I knew I hadn't, but I did recall the universe, and the story about Borealis being found by the Coalition. I also knew I'd hit a $1000 Scratch Off, AND then paid for the Vegas hooker with it; now, THAT is what I call a 'twofer'.

Well done. No doubt a publishable best seller. You should be proud of your talents, and creativity. Thank you for providing me the pleasure of reading it, and for the work it takes to pit it together as a Lit submission.

Kudos,

GeoD

Good balance of war action and erotica. Good pace and not a lot of wasted words.

Thank you very much for this nice story. Congratulations from Belgium.

Amazing story. Best ever.

You did a good job. I liked the combat description, I fortunately it brought back some memories. Overall well done. Nothing really negative to say. Keep up the work.

"Rebellion" is a stretch at best... it's more like "The Rask Tantrum" since the Rask are NOT sympathetic. How could they be? Cooper's assessment of that culture is accurate. It IS a trash fire, but if you're aiming for satire that's not a bad thing, Snek. Otherwise, the Rask are paper thin. I hope that Elysians and Rask in general are implied satire, as they can be a bit tedious otherwise. Your handling of action and geographical setting on the other-hand, is first rate, almost on par with Alistair Maclean.

You've given us plenty of human male on non-human female sex, a handful of human female on non-human male sex, some non-human lesbian action (usually in a threesome or orgy, but still counts), and man on man scenes that you helpfully separate out for those of us who aren't fans of that thing.

Now I don't want to sound like a beggar but I have to ask, would you ever write a sex scene involving both human and non-human females?

(about my previous comment) wait, how could I forget about Reid in Highway to Krell? I apologize.

Thank you for your superb writings and imagination... I started reading this series in order after seeing your Bio... Keep up the good work... Thanks again 👍

it was great as always

alien loving trash, the coalition should have wiped out the rask to set an example.

besides, why the fuck do all the characters in your story have sex on the forefront of their minds? cooper for example has has his squad killed and been captured by the enemy and all he can think about is what big breasts the admiral has? what the fuck goes through your head when you write these scenes snek?

the matriarch is right, the unn is a bunch of soft cucks. rebel as a race, kill countless unn members, then surrender and all is forgiven lol.

Cooper is the best human character you’ve ever written, closely followed by Lena from the Krell arc and Moralez. He’s assertive, defiant, and is an active participant in his seduction, rather than a passive recipient of sexual advances. I don’t know how you do it, but you keep topping yourself with every story you write

Fantastic story, you have developed an exciting and well thought out universe. I have enjoyed it immensely.

Thank You,

Reading this story was epic. I am hesitant to praise one thing as everthing was so well done, you deserve more than five stars so I am kicking it up to 11. Bravo.

Also added to favourites, but actually it's worth a top 10 too. Thank you.

this is prob my first ever comment on this site and i just wanna say well done, its been a tab open on my computer for the 3-4 days it took me to read it. This reminds me how you can have very good and interesting storytelling+ well written porn and it not feel out of place. It reminds me of those trashy romance novels, but has actual plot,dialogue,settings,backstory,ect,ect. one of the best ive read on this site and i will be taking a look at the rest of your catalog.

Gotta love Korbaz. She's not super submissive, she's a Bratty Switch or something.

The giant muscular cat women are just wonderful.

Exceptionally well done. Fantastic character/world building, wonderful dialogue and very pleasant ero-scenes. As expected, worth every bit of the read, thank you for the work you do.

Also, love both of the protagonist-sets, and I think Korbaz and Cooper might be my fav of your character pairings so far.

Cooper is literally Carl Urban and you can't change my mind. I read all of his dialogue in Billy Butchers tone and cadence and it was fucking excellent. Ripper

Wow, really long but it certainly held my attention. Thanks for sharing your story. 5*s.

A genuine novel sized story. Very enjoyable . Thank you. 5*