All Comments on 'The Ravencroft Women Pt. 01'

Great story, can't wait for part 2!

Love it and eager for more as this sexy story unfolds

Well, uh, that was different.

For your first time trying this ....very good can't wait for the next chapters!!

can't wait for more of this story

Not to worry about your writing. Best I’ve read in awhile. 6 stars at least, but I guess 5 will have to do.

Thanks

Tc

All I can say is MORE PLEASE!!!!!!

Great start!

Very nice. Very nice. Look forward to more.

Something new in the category, looking forward to the mystery about the sister, the story definitely could've had more build-up and stuff but there's still a lot to make this story better

I love it! More, More, More please!

Seriously, it is a unique story with powerful characters.

Keep writing!

Great story line and well written. I'll be waiting to hear more about these two and maybe others?

Well that was ridiculous.

First try with incest? You really have a knack, keep goit, this is great

You have talent. Keep up the amazing work. Do what makes you happy. Ignore the negative bs that I am sure will follow. Haters gonna hate. This story has amazing potential.

Best start to a story series I’ve read in ages

Great story, can't wait to see what else you have in store for us.

I love how this story started and the twists and turns so far. Looking forward to more on these characters.

Great start. Can't way for the chapter.

I Liked it. Keep going,

Fun,hope it continues,one thing i didnt get was the character having second thoughts that maybe they were related.if he didnt grow up with her as a sister why let it bother him? As someon who is adopted , personally, i have always felt that everyone is fair game as i am not "related" to any of my "family" and I learned a lot from my "cousins " when i was younger

Very good story. I hope you will write a 2nd chapter.

Strange but good. In part two, maybe reveal his real lineage and let it go from there.

Very good start, but after reading your profile, cuckold would ruin it for most. Probably should have warned if it's in this story.

Well written with concise descriptions that worked to build the images without overdoing it, a pace that moves along well (no bogging down into minutia) and a consistent interior monologue for the first person POV. Not an easy undertaking and you have handled it well. As for the sex scene description, I don't feel that you overdid that either, despite what I read of your comments in the intro. I look forward to reading more from you.

Love this! Love love love…

Please sir.. can I have some more?

Alone in the park is too risky,

Great start!

To the anon concerned about cuckoldry, worry not; I don't intend to have any of that in this story. :-)

Thank you for all your feedback. Part 2 is already writing itself in my head :-D

It's an Erotic Coupling role play story. BTW pulling out is the worst feeling I've ever had, I'll never do it again.

Very good start to the story. You could have easily rushed this entire story but you have not done that and that makes things even better. The fact Isabelle knows something the brother does not, and the sex is far kinkier to her as a result is great.

What a great little story. And, this was just an intro and build!!!!

I hope this is going to be a long, long story. It has real potential.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Scores 5/5

Oh wow, this one snuck up on me. I love the character's banter, lovely prose. Isabelle seems a little crazy, just my type.

Okay.... only one part done, and I'm hooked. Take it where you want, but please continue.

OMG, so hot, and no, the sex scene was not overdone. Can't wait for more.

Wonderful reading! A 5 rating and better. I saw your post about feedback. Not going to write it there. This is writing craftsmanship at a really nice level! The build up, the dialogue, the bitchiness level - everything was just right on target. Even Cinderella running off naked to jump into her pumpkin at the end hour had the right magical touch. {I didn't catch the error in your intro you mentioned in 'story feedback forum' but I saw a missed period farther down in the story ;-) Question: in ["You're mine now... big brother," she said as she exerted herself. "I'm gonna keep you... No take backs..."] did you mean 'exerted' or as·sert·ed. (ə-sûr′tĭd) adj. Confidently stated to be so but without proof; alleged: the asserted value of a painting.. I think, with her cockiness, the latter goes well in that statement. I aspire to your level of writing! Mine is not as engaging as this wonderful piece. dmallord

So hot, loved the story. Can't wait for the next.

Great story, great pacing. Sad it's been months and not seen anything else yet.

please write more of this story

A very nice story though a bit hurried. I would like to ask how he could be walking hand in hand with Isabelle thru the park and be watching her ass at the same time. Hand in hand would mean they are walking side by side. Is Nathan twisting his head to look back over his shoulder at her butt? I don't think so as that would be awkward and obvious to Isabelle. Maybe have her skip ahead two or three steps so that he can check her out as he catches up to her.

Love this story. Crazy women demanding rough sex is the best!

Great start. Plenty of intrigue and sex. Looking forward to reading the next chapter.