All Comments on 'The Right Girl Ch. 01'

Thanks for a great intro. Just a tip, keep your paragraphs shorter regardless of what they taught you in English Comp. Many readers, such as myself, skim through these stories and short, snappy paragraphs hold my attention better.

But, again, great job! I could feel your arousal coming through the story; suspect you ended up typing with damp fingers!

Oh god dont leave us hanging like this please continue the story

. . . and a really good writer. That was extremely sexy.

Dan

Hot start, please keep it going! We've got to have, at least, a sequel, if not, a series.

omg! please you´ve to continue the story! very good start!

Not the most attractive names, but wow this got me going! I'm gonna have to send this to a friend of mine that also lives this stuff!. Knowing him he'll end up reading this in church.....again

Very sexy and just the right clothes! (both in the story and in your picture!)

I adored the idea and the way you portayed it, Becky. You really must take this forward with several more chapters. Get writing again, girl :)

They're is no question you have to write chapter 2 and so on.

5🌟's

Why does anybody get attracted to another person, male or female? From your description, and the emotional state of Amy, it's perfectly natural for her to feel attracted to someone so hot. I think you should consider a sequel to this one; lots of potential. Girl/girl sex is hot! Great writing here.

Amazing start to the story. I could feel your desperation to get your clit as you described the frustration to get your skirt off.