All Comments on 'The Right Impression'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
the right impression

Starts out well, but at the end your need for personal gratification is evident with too many missing and misspelled words.

A four becomes a one.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
quicksand

Nice story until the quicksand.

Unreal to think they could remain aroused while they were sinking.

I suggest rewrite that part and re-submit.

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