All Comments on 'The Rise of Rachel Price T-Girl Pt. 27'

We Rachel junkies were in need of a fix. Thank you!

Epic

Excellent as ever.

It's begining to dawn on Rachel that there is no going back and the advice from Dr Cooper that she needs to talk it through with her mum is a brillantly timed twist.

Bravo! I mean, BRAVO. This is the most complex and yet the hottest part yet. It's getting to the point that I'm making notes re: the story since the objects and characters can be difficult to remember. Have you ever read Dr. Zhivago? Same thing. And on the other hand this episode is a lecture or handbook on "trans-living," if that's even a word!

This episode is also the most accomplished part of the series in terms of consistency, written fluency, and references to particular past episodes. (Of course it would inflame legislatures in some states!) It's very difficult to maintain a consistent story flow over so many chapters. This one, number 27, accomplishes what is a difficult task. With this episode I can see some publishing possibilities but, of course, without the heated sex scenes. It's also the first episode (I think) that doesn't rely on the political intrigue. The political intrigue is a back story but what is most significant are Rachel's expectations and her perceptions of herself. You introduce that perception by Rachel early in the episode when discussing Rachel's central recognition that a being a woman is not about appearance but about function. Exactly. And the reason the "take a pill and become a woman" stories fall short is those other stories fail to recognize that fact.

Perhaps the story line has extended Rachel's recognition of herself as a woman but it adds to the reality of her experience. The extended story line also gives Rachel the opportunity to gain emotional knowledge regarding BJs. Oral sex, of course, like any other sexual act is learned. None of us develops such skill at birth but those skills develop with practice. Charlie and Peter have been central to Rachel's gain in skill since Denver would have been too young and inexperienced to be so skilled.

The conversation with Cooper is the fitting conclusion and so this episode occurs in three parts: initial review of previous story line, flaming sex, more of Rachel's recognition of herself, then acceptance and growing knowledge. The conclusion also sets us up with possible story possibilities. Those possibilities are another aspect of this story that keeps us coming back for more. It also makes us "Rachel addicts" as EricaDoesNow notes. And FernVilla also adds another key insight that there is no going back and that a conversation with her mum IS a brilliantly-timed twist. You could have placed a conversation with mum earlier in the story but you withheld Cooper's conversation and used it at the precise moment when it would be most insightful.

Once again. Bravo. And BTW, the sex and Rachel's insights regarding it relieved the anxiety in me along with enjoying it for its descriptions. Writing about sex is difficult. Too much graphic language spoils it, not enough insight takes away the excitement. Rachel's uncertainty makes it very realistic and also breathlessly exciting.

Whew. Literotica needs to add more stars for this; five stars isn't nearly enough.

Annika

Has Rachel passed the point of no return. I look forward to finding out in the next few chapters. So exciting for her future.

Thanks again for your kind and encouraging comments. It's always a high point of my week to read them, even the one-word ones. Hopefully, we can see that Rachel is very much a person in transition. As you can see, the political intrigue now holds an important place in the personal plot. Rachel might have never engaged in the blow job without the threat to Hunter's life with out it. So, Hunter becomes the second stage of the rocket, which might propel Rachel into orbit or possibly result in a fiery fall from the heavens. The political plot drives Rachel towards the end, and there is a lot of fallout post the Qatar incident.

It's very nice that people pick up on the function over appearance opening. It delves into the gray area between him and her, swirling your hand around in it. It's a big issue philosophically, culturally, and politically at the moment, and it begins to unravel the woolen jumper by tugging at it.

Last week the previous episode got voted up into the top 10 greatest episodes (7.95 stars) for all time the Trans/Cx category . It was a joy to witness, but it only takes a single 1 vote to undo 5 five star votes (I'm guessing they are using the averages ). This is not a complaint by the way. I've publish and left other social writing websites - they use invisible complex algorithms ( which change ) and I find the algorithmic choices poor. The organisation of Literotica is simple but strangely much better. The site is clearly a work of love and is still in progress ( for example the Series system which is being introduced). The New/Popular/Random is a good system and I hope they don't loose it.

To be brutally frank a site is only as good as the readers and commenters and this site ( or category ) and I find the site is excellent.

It's very pleasing to know that the sex is not going to appear on Literary Review's annual Bad Sex in Fiction Award. This is erotica, and as much as you should innovate, you can't ignore the basics.

That said, it would be good to create a less explicit version so that, as you have suggested, I could find a publisher. The story is coming together, and I'm experimenting with a less explicit version. There was a wonderful comment on Chapter 22.

'Hello you write as if you have been watching me, from a distance, knowing my inner most fears and fantasies, inhibitions and repressed desires since i was an insecure boy of 9 or ten, then through my adolescence and early college years. Your chapters have revealed more about me than I could have ever imagined. They make me tremble and deny, cry and drip.'

I was very touched; it makes you, as a writer, want to reach out to more people.

Finally, I'm learning a huge amount about writing. Thanks for the warning about the complexity of characters. I do break the rules - you should generally have different names for different people, so Denver and Douglas can make it confusing, according to good writing guides. As I have said, it feels like Rachel writes her own story, and I just record it. The moment with Hunter being in the elevator just happened on the page, and the plot pivoted on a "what to write next" moment after Rachel said, "this is weird." It seemed logical that Hunter would follow her. The capture of Peter in the corridor also happened when I was just writing the description of the corridor in the first draft.

I mean, I know where the big ending is, but so much emerges as I write (particularly the sex scenes). I've finally given up micro-managing Rachel's life. I think in the rush to follow Rachel's experiences, I'm not paying enough attention to making this as clear as the reader deserves. Thanks for the heads up. So I'm learning a huge amount. For example, readers picked up on the relatively obscure Hallveig and Volk references, but the reference to the Greek myth of the Minotaur went unclaimed. There are still a couple more Easter eggs to be found if people re-read at a later date. This is a wonderful experience. Thank you for walking it with me.

Chel.

ps. On the subject of complete honesty, I'm not sure you could watch Pose in Qatar. I mean, it's on Disney Plus but...

Next chapter is in the launch tube.

OMG! I just came to the realization that I haven't been assigning stars to this story! Very, Very sorry. Every star helps.

Annika

No, I'm not watching you but I wondered if you had some sort of magical "look-inside-me" camera, one that could page through my memories and fantasies! Along with my own fears and fantasies you may be able to see the points in my life where my repressions had the effect of changing and influencing my own life direction. My reflections regarding your Rachel story has intensified my insights, sometimes painfully but also as a type of affirmation. In any case, as the character Rachel is considering her changes my insights have also coalesced. You might see this as a psychodrama without the stage.

When you mentioned your age 9 comment i realized mine started earlier, at about 6 or 7 and at that time none of those thoughts and feelings were oddly sexual but were also without meaning. Within a few years, my experiences became much more meaningful as I attempted to force myself into a masculine mode. Although that forcing never succeeded, of course, my ability to hide became even more prominent to the point where I not only hid from others but also from myself. That leads to the impact of the philosophically, culturally, and politically as you put it.

I don't have a Rachel character who can lead me through a Minotaur experience nor through a jewel-encrusted path but I have my own path and your writing helps to pull it together in ways I never expected. Your writing has also added a depth and a chance to see through the murk inside myself.

Again, BRAVO!

Annika

@racheprice Denver and Douglas are sufficiently different. All they have in common is they both begin with D and are two syllables long.

Please save us from the Alice, Bob and Carol naming convention...

Underneath it all, he's a nerd who's caught up in this web of James Bond and saving his family members, then he has this gay thing going on. I liked it better when he was doing this for money on the side and a piece of ass from Charlie, his first crush. Now he's caught up in listening to this quack turning him gay, ruining his chances for a normal family, by being ruined with all the hormones. He should rebel, quit taking hormones and revert back to Denver, if he even can. Who told him long term hormones weren't permanent.

Luv it can’t wait to get back to it if I have some time away from the storyline.. it’s super infectious to read . Thank you kindly for sharing your talent. Xxx