All Comments on 'The Rosebud Ch. 03'

It's an interesting story with a lot of potential. I really like it. The story is well written and I like your writing style. But I have some pointers if you don’t mind. Because of your fictional world without man I was confused throughout the story, because I didn’t understand the conversations and actions of the characters. It would have been a better reading experience if it had been declared as “Sci-Fi & Fantasy” or at least if it had been explained earlier on. The other thing is the rushed relationship between Vikki and Laura. A pregnant woman would not go with a stranger out of self-preservation and Vikki’s feelings towards Laura came quite sudden, even for a naive person too quickly. Please don’t stop writing, I am eager to hear more about Vikki and Sarah.