All Comments on 'The Run'

Hope this is the start of at least four or five chapters to this story. Well done!

I loved this story, hoping for many more!!

have the makings of a great story. But you really need to do a little editing and break up those long paragraphs into shorter ones.

You gotta do more!

My only gripe, and yes I am that picky, is the whole:

" 5'5" and 75-80 pounds " @@ That would make her UN-Godly under-weight and she wouldn't be able to walk a block let alone run cross-country. You need to add about 40 pounds to her frame, at least.

This is a nice outline for a story. You have a good start, now fill it out. I have to agree with the last comment. Skinny can indeed be sexy, but looking like you’ve just been released from Auschwitz is not.

to what could be a good extended story line. please continue

nice story...well written...different aspect.

enjoyed it.