All Comments on 'The Sacrifice Ch. 01'

AWESOME. Please continue

Not inspired to Great Praises, just Fundamentally Interesting. Pray, Continue.

I'm interested in more.

It's just to sadistic for my taste, I read erotica as a escape from horrors people can inflict on each other not to wallow in them. That is strictly my opinion though.

A very nice beginning to what I hope is a longer multi part series!

I really enjoyed this. It put me in mind of some of Marian Zimmer Bradley's early Darkover series. Very cool!

Quick note to anyone stumbling across this - I have no plans to continue this story. I have a rough draft of two more chapters, but I realized I couldn't figure out a way to end the story to my satisfaction. I'm leaving this chapter up, but don't expect anything more. Sorry! I have started writing some other stories, so hopefully you'll enjoy those.

After re-posting, you might have mentioned your intent to abandon the story in the first sentence. The story is very good and I liked the development. Now, I feel that reading it was a waste of emotional involvement. Still, nice work.

Hi Brent - I'm not sure why you thought it was re-posted? I haven't touched this since 2015. Sorry for any confusion!

I suggest removing the “Ch. 01” from the title, thus leaving it as just The Sacrifice. Then it becomes a terrific short story rather than an unfinished series. Just a thought . . .