All Comments on 'The Second Chance Ch. 12'

Nice

ridiculous

I hope you have an epilogue in the works.

we need closure on this story

I hope my time invested in this story isn't wasted without an ending

Ignor the Natering Naybobs of negetivism...

I'm impressed its your first story. It's a he'll of a lot better than ... Box office "smash" Barbie". (Sarcasm.)

You've had me worried, glad, and intrigued.

So... keep going.

What kind of lawyer takes instructions from his client’s girlfriend, in a divorce case? And once he knew, why didn’t Robert immediately counter those instructions? Why were numerous state police on the scene, none of them searching the park or going to the cabin? It’s a very good story. If you can’t find an editor, try having someone proofread it. That way you’ll at least have help getting past typos and sentence fragments with extra (or missing) words - the stuff that happens from cut and paste.

You had me riveted until the end. The pace of the story accelerated and it took me by surprise. I hope Robert survives. It’s a great story, very entertaining, well written and exciting.