All Comments on 'The Secret Career'

This was bad enough until I reached the "genecological" test.<p>I laughed so hard I had to quit reading. What, did she turn into a tree?<p>The setup was unconvincing, the wife too eager to leave hubby; but "genecological" made this a clear winner as the worst-written submission of the day.

I don't agree with the other commenter. I though all your submissions today were good. This story, in my opinion, needed further development. That is, it needed probably 3 parts. The first part to re-connect emotionally. Second to develop a more physical relationship. The third part complete eroticism. Also, a couple of times within some paragraphs, the verb tense would shift between past to present tense. Should have stayed with same one (past tense). Still a good story.RS.