All Comments on 'The Shelter'

I'm a bi-female who loves man on man action. I would love to read more about this lovely adventure!

...and nice!!

Although the whole him referring to the older man as "daddy" thing threw me off a bit.

It's a great first story and it is good to see the final words; "to be continued"

Make it soon.

Thanks for the good feedback all! It makes me happy to know that people enjoyed it. And motivates me to get part 2 out soon! Part 2 will be much more sexually focused (obviously much of part 1 was background to establish my situation and state of mind), and much kinkier, as i start to explore/discover my sexuality.

There is something so special about the first time. I'm looking forward to the next installment

You say him instead of me and things like that throughout your story and that makes it hard to read. This is a simple fix, just by YOU proofreading what you wrote before you submit it!

It is the least you could do. That is why I gave you one star!

you wrote this part as though you had in mind parts 2, 3 etcetera. I will read the sequel

It is always good to proofread your work, or you will just get people slamming it for the basic spelling and grammar errors you have neglected to remove before publishing. This story has many such issues, and while the overall tale is okay, the punctuation and incorrect grammar usage at times made it a bit annoying to read.

Want an english,teacher to write a fuck story,then u fucking egg heads that complain,write a fucking story...These stories are for jacking of,or having your fuck buddy,read it to you,as he fucks your ass...ripper

I did not care about you're grammar or mistakes. It was a great story and I liked it alot.

Well written and thought out. Plenty of homeless shelters nowadays and I suppose this is more truth than fiction.

Please write more. This is a fantasy I never knew I had.

Myself having fun at the senior citizen facility. Nice old daddys always enjoy a handjob or bj.

great wish it was me