by EK_PANTAGRUEL
Your story was perfect. The loss of control, the surrender to biological urges, the internal conflict. The ending was superb. After this "show", any father who loves his daughters would certainly be shaken. His ultimate disgust in himself is a realistic response, and you've hit it beautifully. All these other stories where the parents and children live happily ever after are pure fantasy, and would rarely, if ever, happen. Cudos to EK Pantagruel.
This was one hell of a yummy story! can't wait for part II hope you'll continue it soon!
You had a great premise, but your transition from present to past tense in the middle of the story broke it up and made it weak. Have an editor check your stories out 'cause you have some real talent. Hope to see more from you.....
Started too fast; the close of this Act 01 too down depressing. But everything else is sooo Hot! Wish my daughter was like these! Great job!