All Comments on 'The Shower Girl'

Quality. Hope this is just the beginning.

great start, hope to read more :)

very good!

This is one the best BW/WM stories I have ever read on Lit. I especially like the male point of view. So many IR BW/WM are written by females that you can start to lose the male perspective of the stories. Keep it up. We need more writing like this.

It was an interesting beginning. I would like more description of the characters physical appearance. It ended wanting me to read more!

As usual, no disappointment reading a story by bronzeage. The playfulness between these two was sweet and sexy.

a wonderful story; masterfully intensifying as the words roll on. I really enjoyed this one! Thank you!

I have a lot to say (mostly positive) but no time to say it right now. Perhaps next week, in private feedback. WM/BW is, by far, my favorite genre - and, when I was younger, it was my favorite sexual (searching for a word here). While reading this brief story, memories of wonderful experiences of forty or fifty years ago came rushing back. When I met the woman I married, forty years ago, I told her that she was pretty damn good, for a white girl. She rightly took it as a complement. Bronzeage writes like someone who knows what he is talking about. If so, he is not only talented, he is also a lucky fellow.

I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing. I am not shy to say that this one made me nice and wet. Crass? Maybe...bold, yeah...

nice story; makes me curious to find my own blue eyed mister.

I stumbled upon your submission (ok ok...I saw the pretty blue eyes and clicked the link in your sig. Kind of a stumble :) ) I was very impressed with the story. I love the imagery and character description. The story is well written and very very hot. Thank you for the erotic entertainment.

How did I miss this? I hope you do more with these two.

Like the build-up. The prose is better than most of the prose on Lit, too.

Five.

I liked the vivid details they did draw me into the story but there were a few jarring point of view shifts in there that made me have to go back and reread to make sure I knew who's head I was in. Other than that I liked it.