All Comments on 'The Sibling Code Ch. 01'

I'm not a fan of BDSM but this one has some special flair that kept me captivated, and the added possibility of a romance between bro & sis only fuelled the fire. I can actually see them getting into a 3-way relationship where the bro dates Crystal for the public but then ravished his sis in the bedroom, seen it before and it can actually work here. Or he can simply take his sis as his and be done with the domina MUAHAHAHAH.

5* and looking for MOAR!

Loved it! I hope part 2 comes soon!

You're on a winner here.

Please keep it going.

Loved it keep it going

the switching perspectives killed it for me. Other than that a great story.

Loved it. Got me so hard!! Thank you.

Please continue the story my brother.

Finally, someone that knows how to write an erotic story!!

Thumbs up

You are doing a great job of building things up. I look forward to next chapter.

The next chapter very soon please.

Need more please...very good story.

The buildup was great. 5/5

Brilliant story so far really enjoyable. Bring on chapter 2

Please post next part

5*****

This is a fabulous story! It's fascinating and superbly written. I can't wait for Part 2 of this story!

Great read, great progression. Cant wait for part 2

"I was a sergeant" I think you mean "sargeant"?

"At 26-years old" - "At TWENTY-SIX years old."

Please learn the different usages of periods and commas, because you don't have a clue. Just one of many, many examples:

"I could hear Sabrina struggling against her bonds, frustrated she replied, "

Should be: " I could hear Sabrina struggling against her bondsPERIOD. Frustrated COMMA she replied,"

It's depressing to see adults who don't know the most basic rules of English grammar.

You're right , it is depressing to see adults who don't know proper grammar.

1. It is sergeant, NOT sargeant.

2. 26-years-old is correct (stylebook)

3. Your version of the struggling sentence is correct BUT so is mine!

So if you're going to throw in your two cents, make sure you know what you're talking about.

Semper Fi Jarhead

Great story. Can't wait for the rest.

You should have been in The Old Corps!

It's disappointing to see adults who can't spell to save their lives but still try to call someone out about their own misspelling. As a prior service Sergeant (it's a title and capitalized) in the Marines, I can tell you it is spelled correctly in this story. Quit nitpicking the few punctuation errors and enjoy the writing skills this author obviously possesses.

YOU ROCK!

and Semper Fi brother!

I love this story, so hot.

Keep it going you. Are an amazing writer

Good but hope it stays with just siblings and not crystal getting involved would spoil it.

Seems silly to wish the two girls who are already involved and who are both obviously interested in him to not get involved.

FFM with real affection is about as good as it gets.

But I guess everyone has their own fetish...

Brother, sister, and girl friend lover..a perfect group of lovers

Can't wait for the next Episode

EXCELLENT

I wish the second chapter make the brother give a thorough pussy licking to Crystal and Sabrina relents and gently guides her brothers cock into Crystal’s waiting pussy to deaden the stinging of her spanked, hot and red buttocks! Ofcorse Sabrina has climaxed and squirted into her brother’s mouth twice before she lets him fuck her and she controlled herself and does not cross the line becos she is not on the pill! Does the author agree? Is it a good scenario?

Good premise.

Sort of too much going on with chnging the perspective about who's telling the story.

Could have used more foreplay -- whether while Sabrina was bound, or not, or both.

Action could have been slowed down. For example, during the blowjob, there's not enough in the way of details of what hapened. Saying she gave him the best blowjob of his life doesn't say much.

Four stars.

The build up was fantastic, great job.

One of my favourite stories.

Great premise and build up. Thank you!!!

FuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuucK

HOT!!!

EXCELLENT!!!

A great premise that you have built upon beautifully.

Good premise.

But no tension. No reluctance that had to be overcome.

Three stars.