All Comments on 'The Sibling Diaries Pt. 03'

A little short. Writing a little choppy.

Great story. But needs editing. You are having trouble keeping names straight.

Still too many spelling mistakes and sentences that don't make sense, such as "When everyone left Brian hung his arm around Brian's shoulders". Why so many uses of capital letters in the middle of sentences.? I do hope the next chapters get better. Only a 3 so far.

I like the characters. I hope you will continue this very nice story. Thank you.

I am enjoying your story, but your grammar and typo / word errors are getting tedious. Please have a friend proof read your manuscript before posting it. The last two chapters seemed a bit rushed. Your basic premise is exciting, so take your time as you add episodes.

Great story!!!

Please continue !!!

A little editing would help

Can’t wait for the next chapter

Emily is a good teacher.

Why only 6 inches? Not every guy is a foot long, but 7 or 8 inches would have been better for a tall basketball player. Still this is OK.

Love the short chapters close together.

Bring it on!

You desperately need a proofreader or two to help you catch all of the mistakes that you make. 3/5 on a halfway decent concept. I only wish that Xarth or shakna would have written it instead of you. They don't have the childish mistakes in their stories that you exhibit here.

ScottishTexan is correct, a proof-reader would really do you well as an author; his comments are harsh, and he is an experienced reader (as am I)...AND, AND...the comments about other authors writing the story are REALLY UNWARRANTED...

I love how Emily and Alex are coming along...and how much they actually LOVE EACH OTHER!! SSSOOO GOOD!!

FIVE**5**STARS!! 🌠🌠🌠🌠🌠🌋🌋🌋🌋🌋😈