by eronoire
I thought this chapter was excellent, you wrote a great piece. I hope you continue on with this story, and I wouldn't change anything you wrote in this chapter. Try not to let the negative comments get to you, a writer writes for themselves, not the audience.
simply superb. don't stop now. you have to continue. its your duty.......
a pity you turned him in to a complete fucking asshole of a jerk - would have been better with fun and humour added to it out in the country.