All Comments on 'The Sixth School Ch. 001'

Keep it you give the right amount to keep a reader intrested

Very interesting mix of elements; magic, gaming, supernatural. Will be curious to see how this progresses. Didn't see any claring errors and story has a solid flow, now to see how the world building and mix of old memories/new life interact.

Hmm interesting start and good potential, will be following closely :)

Looking forward to next story

An intriguing start. I usually see the ‘game world’ and ‘person gets stuck in another world’ genres as separate, so I’m interested in where you’re going with this. (Well, given the site, and mention of a lust score, I have my suspicions)

I know that you said you’re planning weekly updates, but do you have things planned out or even already written? Because if so, I’d recommend making backups. Too many good authors on here had things plotted out, lost everything, and then had a difficult time recovering or even just gave up.

Repeat post?

Enjoyed a good fantasy story that also has sex. Looking forward to listening to the other chapters

I just stumbled across your stories. An interesting premise and start.

Promising start....

A capital letter usually only occurs after a point.

If dialogue ends in a point, the next sentence ought to start with a capital letter.

If dialogue on the other hand ends in a comma, the next word ought to start with a lower case letter because the sentence of which the dialogue is a part has not yet ended.

i just found your story. An interesting start.

good start. just enough mystery to keep things interesting

Innovative plot. A nicely written introduction. There is not enough description about the accident and how two"dead?" bodies became one almost living body. The screen is a mystery to the protagonist and to me. lLooking forward to chapter two.

I wonder who is going to fire Checkov's Ants. And how, for that matter.

Nice hook, intriguing start, hope it keeps holding up.

I like it so far. It is different. Not another rehash of an overused story line.. it leaves me curious about what is next. Good luck

I liked the concept but found it slightly rambling. Continue please

Feels like a strong start, looking forward to reading more!

Very interesting. Strong isekai vibes here. I can't wait to read more!

chapters r way to short

OK, intriguing opener. You got me ready for next one.