All Comments on 'The Sixth School Ch. 003'

the story has lots ofpotential and i will keep reading but i think far too much space is given to the lists of points

This is a very interesting beginning.

Enjoying the progression of this story! Hopefully he learns a lot from this BAMF healer.

Looking forward to how the story will develop from here, keep the good work!

Digging this, it's got great potential..

Promising start; it will be interesting to see how it develops. I have one quibble that wouldn't normally be worth raising, but in "System"/GameLit fiction I think the math matters: To go from 10% to 20% of healing channeled to health is not a 10% increase, but a doubling in the rate of effective healing, i.e. a 100% increase. So it's not surprising that the healer would notice. (It IS a 10 percentage POINT change, but that's not relevant.) Similarly, it's wrong to say a 10% increase in temptation to grope would mean that out of a group of 100 women, ten would now be tempted to grope him. Rather, if in a group of 100 women, ten were tempted to grope him before the stat bonus (perhaps an optimistic estimate), a 10% increase would be ONE additional woman tempted, so 11 total.

Of course, lots of people struggle with math and with percentages in particular, so it's not unrealistic that the character would get this wrong, but unless that is a plot point, the mistakes distract and detract from the story.

@ThArsonist 😅 Thanks for the math lesson.

Hope this stays up this time around. It's pretty annoying when chapters keep disappearing and reappearing all the time.

why are these being republished? are there changes? how are the old comments here?

When will part 4 come out?

I like how you lay out the story and keep it moving along.

A little less instructional. An interesting concept but still needs to move the story along with the scoring being a comment on the situation rather than the other way around.

Now the game begin...

Story foundation has now been "laid". However, shouldn't there be more magic points from previous visits by the healer? Or was it just start up energy?

intrigued.

I think I got a general idea, but his screen doing all the math and Alena doing all the work is still beyond my comprehension. Intriguing story, which I may finally understand.

laying the ground work nice!!!

Nice fob.you are keeping me interested. Good slow development

Healer should really notice a big change in healing if she's very good. After all, he now healing twice as much! 20% is double 10%, or +100% faster healing compared to what the healer would have seen before.