All Comments on 'The Sixth School Ch. 010'

I love this story.

Like the story... Would be nice for longer Chapters. You do have quite a nice line going.

Please keep up the good work........

Absolutely love this story. Curious how you will tackle the fast forwarding we will need to get to any helpfull level of magic on our MC. I'm sure the healer will also get some healing for her mana pathways out of her teaching :p

Chapter 12 is up on my Patreon.

Enjoying the development of this story - thank you

Promising, but one note: Olivia's smiles crossing her lips, appearing on her lips, etc. gets silly pretty quickly.

Well, now there's an apparent inconsistency in the story. You established in Chapter 005 that Shalia is approximately the same age as Greg (18, per Chapter 001), and is jealous of Alena because she had to "cede the title" as the most beautiful girl in town to her when she showed up. But if Alena has been here six years, Shalia was only 12 when she arrived. So probably too young to be established as the town beauty, and certainly too young to be compared with a grown woman.

Loving it, keep it up.

Your writing and ideas are impressive, and my only problem with your story is that I can’t read more of it!

@Anonymous, At no point did I say that Shalia got the title of most beautiful when she was 12.

GR8 Chapter .

Another informative chapter this is becoming quite the saga really looking forward to the next installment

@BlaQQuil: No, but you said she lost it when Alena arrived, and that happened six years ago. And if Shalia is now 18… you do the math.

I appreciate the story and am so excited for what will clearly be an epic tale with a very interesting spin in the form of the HUD in a land with other magics. Just throwing it out there I would happily wait longer if you would ever release multiple chapters together cuz you’ve got me craving more! You set up a huge world for our hero to explore and master, well done!

@Anonymous: Please send me the chapter you are getting this from...

@BlaQQuill: 1. Greg's body is 18: Chapter 001 ("Coincidentally, the young man whose body he'd taken over was also eighteen years of age.") 2. Shalia is the same age: Chapter 005 ("Being one of the most beautiful girls his age, it was only natural that the previous owner of his body had developed a crush on the girl.") 3. Shalia ceded the title of most beautiful in town to Alena: Chapter 005 ("For a young lady who'd always been the center of attention because of her looks, it didn't feel nice to have to cede the title of most pretty to someone else.") and Chapter 004: ("Her large doe eyes, small button nose, and luscious lips placed her firmly in the position of the town's top beauty among the younger generation. If Alena wasn't in this town, then the caveat 'among the younger generation' would be taken out of the title.") 4. Finally, Alena arrived in town 6 years ago: this chapter.

@Anonymous None of that indicates that the title was ceded when she was twelve. Just because Alena arrived when this girl was twelve, doesn't mean she was tbe town's top beauty at 12. You've pieced together a puzzle that was never there to begin with and created a picture that just isn't there...

I don't comment usually but you seems to appreciate it so here I am : I really like your story so far, honestly I came for the smut but I stayed for the plot. I hope you will keep going to deliver us the world and characters you're creating because it has a lot of potential!

I don't comment usually but you seems to appreciate it so here I am : I really like your story so far, honestly I came for the smut but I stayed for the plot. I hope you will keep going to deliver us the world and characters you're creating because it has a lot of potential!

It's been a while since I've seen a story this long, with quality plot and smut in just the right ratio

@BlaQQuill: I think the problem must be that you don't really know the meaning of the word "ceded." To cede something is to give up something YOU HAVE. You can't cede something you never had in the first place to someone who already has it. So for Shalia to cede the title of prettiest to Alena, she must have, up until that time, been--or at least thought herself--the prettiest.

keep going, i like!

This is very entertaining reading. I quite like it. Good world building and dialogue. A bit info dumpy but, still a very interesting world.

Now then; keep at it!

As an RPG player and game master, I'm enjoying the system and world building.

2nd year professor Olivia. That was quite the lecture. Felt like I should have been taking notes.

The Olivia character is really clever. Adds an element of mystery for the future as well as humor for the present. Well done

You have stimulated my glabella.

The only thing I didn't get was why he asked of all the other houses of magic, but didn't ask about his own.

I really enjoyed the description of the 5 schools of magic. It was rich in detail, creative and for this mundane reader, quite comprehensive. Well done

All those soul messages earlier and ways they can be damaged are gonna come back around, aren't they?

Olivia seems fun.