by BlaQQuill
Terrible you wanna write good fictional stories(story is pretty good btw) take your butt to Reddit. I’m here to get one off not to read Harry Potter books.
Just when you think the trouble is over ... more sh** starts hitting the fan. Cliffhanger alert
I am really enjoying your story and plan to continue reading as much as you post. So as a bit of constructive criticism; most of this chapter could have been condensed into five or six paragraphs. You are unnecessarily repeating information, that us the ready already know. Again thank you for writing, and sharing your story.
The plot thickens! This has been one WILD ride so far! I can't wait to see what happens next!
OK so touching the staff like that required a little bit carrying the Idiot Ball, but I get it.
Curious what tricks will be done to drain mama out of poor Alena. Cut yourself or something to get healing?