All Comments on 'The Spellbook Ch. 01-02'

... but thank you for the heads-up about the contents of the story. What a help it would be if more authors did likewise.

A LOT longer. There's a lot of potential here... well written and thought out. I hope you'll consider doing a chapter 2 (and 3, 4, 5.....)

You could use an editor for your writing, words such as gravities are incorrect here and instead you should have used "gravity's".

The story was short and has potential but some glaring inconsistencies occur. Is she a friend who is a girl or a girl friend? If they were together than it is likely that they would have already done a 69. If they were just friends make that more clear.

Well written and sexy, though it could use a little more detail.

Good job a little more detail would be nice and at least 2 more chapters

Quite good. looking forward to new chapters.

Not to many stories like this. We need more like this one. Thanks for writing it hope to see more.

That was Amazing dude, we need more!!!!

Please

that was a lot of fun I cant wait to read some more.

Ever going to write more?

so hot! please make more i freakin love this!