All Comments on 'The Spider's Web Ch. 01'

Very nice beginning and I love the way you introduced Zirase. His learning of English was very convincing too. Loved the first chapter!

This was very cleverly thought out and written. The angle you took having Zirase have her cut herself for the blood as opposed to taking it was really well done as was the learning of the language as he attempted to converse with Jack. I also was impressed with not only the details involved in creating the magic but picking the correct stone so as not to be too weak or too strong of a spell and yet the feedback he experienced was a brilliant touch to show that you never know how magic is going to work out. I look forward to see where this tale goes and what else we might learn about pre and post convergence. Thank you for all you put into you posted works, it is appreciated.

Be well and stay safe.

J.D.

5*! Fascinating story development of such an alien intelligence. I look forward to reading more!