All Comments on 'The Start Pt. 01'

Wow love your story so far, I am from the UK and have very similar interests

Please continue your story asap

Love your story, please continue.

Very good story. The backstory and scene has been set. Will definitely read you next chapter(s) when you release them

This has the feel of a true story, and I'll certainly be watching for more. These short snippets, though are a bit of a turnoff. We hardly start and it's over. We need more in each episode.

TV would read better.

It was a decent start, the only thing that bothered me was that you spoke of her beginning to develop when most girls start to develop around 12! You did say she was 20?

I suppose this was as far as you got before you jacked off and ended the story?

It’s aggravating trying to read a story when the author has no concept of punctuation, or editing. Less than impressed.

No descriptions of the people involved, slow build up and then it stops abruptly. Needs work to be a first part